Some people believe that sport competitions are a source of emotional stress for young people. Therefore, youth should be banned from participating in sport competitions. Do you agree or disagree?

Competitional sports are common for
adolescents, such as racing, swimming and
ball games. Some people believe that tense
competition in sports causes emotional
stress among youngsters. Therefore,
students must be prohibited from
participating in competitional sports.
Personally, I disagree with this practise.
Reasons are as followed.

First of all, competition all sports induce
excitement rather than stress. Students are
eager to win in sports and they are excited to
participate in it. As a matter of fact,
adolescents never absent from sports
because of the so-called emotional stress.
Actually they enjoy the competition in
sports. Take myself for example, the first
competition I participated was 400 meters
race. I was extrimely excited about it and
enjoyed the applaudes and cheers from my
classmates.

Secondly, participating in match nurish
sportsmanship. There are plenty of short
cuts and advantages if palyers do not abide
by rules. Howerer, only the winner who sticks
to rules deserves the respect from rivals and
audiences. That is sportsmanship.
Adolescents acknowledge the concept of
sportsmanship gradually in the participation
of sports. They may take short cut in theri
first match, but jadges will give a foul to
them and urge them to follow rules.
Consequently, young people develop the
essentials of sportsmanship.

Lastly, match works as an incentive to
improve performance of paticipationer.
Losing a match is normal. A paticipationer
realises his weakness and contrive to
conquer it. That faciliates the improvement
of performance, Lebron James is a NBA
superstar. He experienced lose of games like
other players. The difference is that he found
out the weakness and overcame it. He
practiced basketball skills and built a robust
body, that rendered the superstar of today.

To recapitulate, sports competitions do not
cause stress, actually it is excitement. Also,
match benefits the development of
sportsmanship and improvement of players
That is why I believe young people should
not be baned from paticipating in match

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)
Essays by the user:

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, consequently, first, if, lastly, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, such as, as a matter of fact, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1843.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 316.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.83227848101 5.12529762239 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.27188103328 2.80592935109 117% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.591772151899 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 531.9 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 16.0721442886 168% => OK
Sentence length: 11.0 20.2975951904 54% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.8512544743 49.4020404114 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 68.2592592593 106.682146367 64% => OK
Words per sentence: 11.7037037037 20.7667163134 56% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 5.44444444444 7.06120827912 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 50.0 4.38176352705 1141% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.324841433676 0.244688304435 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0715830512996 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0835551922533 0.0667982634062 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0576272952605 0.151304729494 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.075804755673 0.056905535591 133% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.0946893788 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.85 50.2224549098 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 11.3001002004 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.35 12.4159519038 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 9.78957915832 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.4 10.1190380762 63% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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