Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school Discuss both views

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Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school.

Discuss both views

In today's materialistic driven world, everyone is seeking ways to get a well-paid job and a successful occupation. While some people contend that this can be achieved by gething tertiary education, others believe that working after high school is more beneficial. From my point of view, although the latter may seem justifiable, I tend towards the idea that people should study at the university for a better future job.
On the one hand, partaking in the manual labor and job market early after school can bring sooner financial-related advantages. It is obvious that for the students who come from marginalized areas or impoverished families, working earlier is more suitable for their conditions. Those students can contribute to their family's pocket and save an astronomical amount of tuition fee, campus fee and the like. In addition, the earlier people start up, the more certain their position in the company is as they can be deemed as seniors as against their peers. For example, unlike other friends spending 4 or 5 years studying at the college, those young employees have already got a stable job and made a living. That is the reason why many people pour into the job market after high school.
On the other, I believe the education people get from university can better prepare them for a more prospective career. Firstly, undergraduates will appear with higher employability if they have qualified certificates and diplomas. According to some research, 80% of the businesses are more inclined to recruit candidates who excel in their learning at the university. Furthermore, it is not only about the academics but the students can acquire needed skills, which can be transferable to their later job during university. The projects they participate in with friends, the internship they do and etc can equip them with problem-solving skills, team-working skills, to name but a few. As a result, studying at the university can be a precursor for students' better-off life and occupation.
In conclusion, while there are certain benefits to working after school, I am, however, convinced that the university is more conducive to finding well-paid jobs as it offers needed academics and hones the social and working skills of the undergraduates.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...or and job market early after school can bring sooner financial-related advantage...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, so, well, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1894.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 366.0 315.596192385 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17486338798 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97137145847 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565573770492 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 587.7 506.74238477 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.8904099157 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.375 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.875 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5625 7.06120827912 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.265683520455 0.244688304435 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0892716296697 0.084324248473 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0813483843725 0.0667982634062 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175719915429 0.151304729494 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0919234894058 0.056905535591 162% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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