Some people believe that the advent of economical air travel has been very beneficial by making international travel more accessible while others argue that it has had a very negative impact Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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Some people believe that the advent of economical air travel has been very beneficial by making international travel more accessible, while others argue that it has had a very negative impact.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In today’s fast changing world, the appearance of air transition plays a crucial role for international tourism. Although some people suppose air travel would cause a myriad of pessimistic effects, I am still convinced that this issue has both brightsides and downsides to debate.

On the one hand, there are several negative effects that people can consider.In particular, utilizing planes as a major transportation can cause some risks. According to recent studies , when the plane had an accident , the number of people who died would be extremely high, accelerating almost 300 passengers per 1 plane. Moreover, the price of each plane ticket is also higher than that of others, about 100- 200$ for 1 ticket while 10- 100$ for other transportations. Therefore, a majority of people who live in slums or living on a budget can not pay for this one.

On the other, it is undeniable that what a big boon of air travel brings to the national economy or the convenience of citizens is totally supreme. Instead of spending hours visiting another city or country, It will reduce noticeably amount of time it takes to go. For example, in the past, going abroad can take people days , thanks to the existence of planes, it even takes almost 18-20 if they want to visit the US, which is a really far distance. Furthermore, with the proliferation of air transportations, people can expose to this method at ease, therefore the figure for people can travel in a day at the present more than in the past.

In conclusion, air travel is a two-edged sword,nevertheless, I still believe that air transportation can bring more benefits to society than it could be imagined.

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Average: 7.7 (2 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, moreover, nevertheless, really, so, still, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion, in particular

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1388.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 281.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93950177936 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09427095027 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99914852692 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.629893238434 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 428.4 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 28.4503336993 49.4020404114 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 126.181818182 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5454545455 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.3636363636 7.06120827912 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167458766977 0.244688304435 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0630931061864 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0444866854509 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108272551007 0.151304729494 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0255121294166 0.056905535591 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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