Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory
part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving
the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do
you agree or disagree?
Some people think that free social activities should be a mandatory part of high school programs. While students who take part in these activities may face some unexpected issues, I agree that educators should design required community
services for their high school students without any payments.
On the one hand, the most considerable trouble affects students when participating
in public activities is the shortage of time. Particularly, they may be less focused
on their core lessons in class, even lack leisure time because of spending too
much time for community services. Besides, there are obligatory services which
do not suit to everyone. For example, working for a charity at mountainous places
or suburban areas requires students to have to go far away or teaching sports to
younger children at outdoor stadium demands a good health. All of these types of
work do not fit to the weak girls or unhealthy students.
On the other hand, attending unpaid public services will bring great benefits to
high school students. Firstly, these programs create a positive environment for
students to be raised in a holistic way, not only improving their social knowledge
but also motivate their perception about the outdoor life. This is really an
appropriate method to train them on how to work for the interest of community
instead of living only for themselves. Secondly, taking part in public activities
such as volunteer campaigns and charity organizations is a highlighted point which
makes their resume brilliant. If an applicant who has the same qualification, as
well as experiences with other candidates, would like to apply for a scholarship
or a competitive job, his past activities for the interest of community may make an
outstanding contribution in helping him defeat the others.
In conclusion, although there are some disadvantages, it seems to me that we
should design more unpaid obligatory community programs for high school
students.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in a holistic way" with adverb for "holistic"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... environment for students to be raised in a holistic way, not only improving their social knowle...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, well, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1696.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 314.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.40127388535 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90480079558 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.608280254777 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 512.1 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.0084524475 49.4020404114 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.461538462 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1538461538 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.9230769231 7.06120827912 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 23.0 4.38176352705 525% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.344914454272 0.244688304435 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113924072234 0.084324248473 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0672482556045 0.0667982634062 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0832101319866 0.151304729494 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0737868226575 0.056905535591 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.0946893788 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.34 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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