Some people believe that unpaid community work (for example: working for a charity, teaching sports to children) should become a compulsory part of the high school curriculum. To what extent, do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, people often argued that should the government put unpaid community work into a compulsory subject in high school. From my point of view, I partly agree with this opinion and in this assignment, I will show that putting unpaid community work into the curriculum has both benefits and drawbacks.
First of all, it can be denied that unpaid community work is a way for student to have a broader view of life. High school students are almost between the age of 15 years old and 18 years old – the age of people who being grown up into adults. When they do unpaid community work, they can develop communication, attain maturity. They also received love, the “thank you” message, develop their own relation. Doing charity is also a chance to students know more about the life of unlucky people, therefore, students will gradually treasure their full life. A survey recently had questioned 100 people who did unpaid community work in their high school and conducted their answers that unpaid community work really built their character, personality to be better and greater.
Besides, there are some cons of putting unpaid community work into a compulsory part of the high school. The young people hereabouts have to learn more and more subjects than we did. The amount of lecture, book and work that they are enforced to study cost them so much time a day. A research of some countries in the world has shown that students often study until 11 pm, even until 1 am or 2 am, and wake up to ready to school at 7 am. This leads to a fact that their health are not covering, affect to their learning ability. Once unpaid community work become a compulsory part of the high school, this alarming situation will continue to recur and cannot be terminated.
In a nutshell, as every coin has two sides, the unpaid community work has both its pros and cons. To me, although the unpaid community work brings lot of benefits, at the moment, the government should not put this into a compulsory part in the high school until they can solve problem of numerous loads of school-work, which damage severely students ‘s condition.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'research'.
Suggestion: Research
... to study cost them so much time a day. A research of some countries in the world has show...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, if, really, so, therefore, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1779.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 370.0 315.596192385 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80810810811 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38581623665 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48918918919 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535135135135 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 532.8 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.3623387683 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.1875 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.125 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.8125 7.06120827912 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.350726174541 0.244688304435 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126211435498 0.084324248473 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0972311770062 0.0667982634062 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.234257250449 0.151304729494 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0202702189251 0.056905535591 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 50.2224549098 130% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 8.58950901804 87% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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