Some people claim that museums and art galleries will not be needed because people can see historical objects and works using a computer. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Maintaining museums or art galleries remains a major concern nowadays due to throughout the use of a computer, a person can see any historical objects and works. However, I believe that the existence of such place still plays an important role in the cultural diversity of a country.
Nowadays, arm-chair tourism becomes popular, it shows a capability of seeing the whole world through television or a computer without needed to pay a visit on a destination. Interestingly, there are numerous programs which content is about the life of our ancestor in previous centuries. All of them are displayed under vivid images and videos. I have to concede that it was made attractable, however, experiencing an object or event throughout multimedia would never be comparable to travelling to an actual place, by viewing a life-size object and surrounding things. Museums and art galleries aimed their best to serve this, not only numerous historical objects which has been bequeathed by our prior generation, are exhibited, but it also vividly illustrates different aspects of their lives.
On the other hand, museums and art galleries also play a vital role in the educational purpose about a country’s custom and culture. In fact, such places attract lots of tourists. It is the most favorable destination for those who want to explore the history and culture of the visited country. In addition, some museums also collaborate with local people to encourage them to expressively tell real stories about their grandfather lives, who deeply understand their ancestors. No images nor videos is capable to convey such things. Furthermore, those places are also be often chosen as an interest destination for family trips at weekend where parents can teach their children what our ancestors have done and been sacrificed to keep our peaceful life, which helps them realize how expensive the war is, and such mistake should not be repeated in their future.
In conclusion, although the benefits brought by the advancement of technology in the sense of appreciation for historical works cannot be ignored, maintaining museums and art galleries still have some advantage for residents to capable to feel a full sense about what our ancestors have done before.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 574, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, so, still, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1900.0 1615.20841683 118% => OK
No of words: 362.0 315.596192385 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24861878453 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89791513879 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 176.041082164 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.593922651934 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 600.3 506.74238477 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 83.6964876253 49.4020404114 169% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.714285714 106.682146367 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8571428571 20.7667163134 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.28571428571 7.06120827912 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208967583023 0.244688304435 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0595039034648 0.084324248473 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.070884686701 0.0667982634062 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134104544481 0.151304729494 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0342683769293 0.056905535591 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.46 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 78.4519038076 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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