Some people say that all young people should have full-time education until they are 18 years old. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Some people say that all young people should have full-time education until they are 18 years old. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

These days, there are people of whom are young are being taken care. One of the major things that people look after the most is education for children. A lot of citizens believe that the young should spend full-time studying until they are about 18 years old. I disagree with this statement and the essay will discuss in detail and support for my idea.
To begin with, on condition that kids expend their all time learning, their health will be harmful. It means that instead of having free time to play sports, they have to study academic subjects as maths, literature, history and so on. It causes that their body could not grow completely and their immune system is not strong enough to protect them from some diseases. This is because children do not have time to practice their health. Provided that young people are not strong, they do not study as well as they can. For instance, people will work the most excellently as long as they have strong health and comfortable feeling. Therefore, studying all day is not essential and seems to be one of the worst solutions to training kids to become good students.
Secondly, it can not deny that social skills are the most important factor for children to succeed in the future. In other words, the young would rather learn social skills and make friend with other people than spend too much time attend classes at the school. This is because in spite of the fact that young people have wide and deep knowledge which they studied at their school, they would never succeed in their life so long as they will not have practical skills. For example, in Vietnam, a number of citizens who have no job increase quickly because Vietnamese students lack practical skills which many companies require. Therefore, instead of learning academic majors at the school, children should be taught social and practical skills that will allow them to have a well-paid job and good relationships in their future.
In conclusion, full-time education is not essential for the young. In my opinion, it should have been demonstrated abundantly that children who are under 18 do not need to learn all day.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 188, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... under 18 do not need to learn all day.
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as well as, in my opinion, in other words, in spite of, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1769.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 369.0 315.596192385 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79403794038 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3251179699 2.80592935109 83% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.50406504065 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 516.6 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.2837160373 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.2777777778 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.88888888889 7.06120827912 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.336646378468 0.244688304435 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111864237833 0.084324248473 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.074584071229 0.0667982634062 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.233550615694 0.151304729494 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0687972715124 0.056905535591 121% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.0946893788 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 50.2224549098 136% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 12.4159519038 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.2 8.58950901804 84% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 78.4519038076 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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