Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasingly the number of sport facilities. Other, however, say that this would have little effect on public health. Discuss both of view and give your own opinions.
A problem of modern societies is the declining level of health in the general population,
with conflicting views on how to tackle this worrying trend. One possible solution is to
provide more sports facilities to encourage a more active lifestyle.
Advocates of this believe that today’ s sedentary lifestyle and stressful working conditions
mean that physical activity is no longer part of either our work or our leisure time. If there
were easy-to-reach local sports that could be offered would cater for all ages, levels of
fitness and interests: those with painful memories of PE at school might be happier in the
swimming pool than on the football pitch.
However, there may be better ways of tackling this problem. Interest in sport is not
universal, and additional facilities might simply attract the already fit, not those who most
need them. Physical activity could be encouraged relatively cheaply, for example by
installing exercise equipment in parks, as my local council has done. This has the added
benefit that parents and children often use them together just for fun, which develops a
positive attitude to exercise at an early age.
As well as physical activity, high tax penalties could be imposed on high-fat food products,
tobacco and alcohol, as excessive consumption of any of these contributes to poor health.
Even improving public transport would help: it takes longer to walk to the bus stop than to
the car.
In my opinion, focusing on sports facilities is too narrow an approach and would not have
the desired results. People should be encouraged not only to be more physically active but
also adopt a healthier lifestyle in general
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'belief' (noun) instead of believe (verb)?
Suggestion: belief
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Message: Consider simply using 'of' instead.
Suggestion: of
...o and alcohol, as excessive consumption of any of these contributes to poor health. Even...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, well, for example, in general, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1424.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 274.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19708029197 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65764609059 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.656934306569 0.561755894193 117% => OK
syllable_count: 440.1 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.9545294962 49.4020404114 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.666666667 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8333333333 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.41666666667 7.06120827912 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 20.0 4.38176352705 456% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.139716120794 0.244688304435 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0519528432558 0.084324248473 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0393743019829 0.0667982634062 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0373061176723 0.151304729494 25% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0417776558598 0.056905535591 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.34 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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