Some people say that devoting one’s time to family activities is more important than
spending time working. Others believe that dedicating one’s time to work is more
important
Discuss both these views and five your own opinion.
In the modern life, people have different priorities, someone select to focus more on their business while others prefer to have more time with their family and relatives. Personally, I think that we should have a balanced view regarding the disputation.
According to many people, they devotes themselves to develop career. They believe that career would be the most important target of their life, as a successful career would change their life. For example, they would be able to earn a lot of money in order to buy a luxurious car, live in a big house, travel overseas or wear fancy clothes. Therefore, they are more concentrated on their career improvement. One of those ways would be by working longer and more dedicated than what an normal employee would do. Additionally, they also usually take part in training program which connect with their work during the night or in the weekend. Consequently, they do not have time enough for themselves and for their relationships as well.
On the contrary, other groups of people believe that family, relatives and friends are more important than works. They believe that the more they are with the family, the more developed their spirit. It is considered that people should be close to relatives and neighbors, as they are the first one who will help during difficulties or life problems. In conclusion, many of these people can not improve their careers, because they do not have interest to their job-developments.
In my honest opinion, I think that people should find the way to balanced their life. It means that people must develop their potential and should also get targets and ambitions in their career life, but they should not sacrifice the socialization time as well. People should learn more about time management such as setting priorities at work. Therefore, they could work more efficient. As a result, people do not have to work overtime and they could spend time with their family and friends.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 32, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'devote'
Suggestion: devote
...tation. According to many people, they devotes themselves to develop career. They beli...
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Line 2, column 481, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...ing longer and more dedicated than what an normal employee would do. Additionally,...
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Line 2, column 732, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ves and for their relationships as well. On the contrary, other groups of people ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, regarding, so, therefore, well, while, for example, i think, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 24.0651302605 183% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1648.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 327.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03975535168 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81920699212 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.510703363914 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 504.0 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.5800748517 49.4020404114 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.866666667 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.93333333333 7.06120827912 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249824338752 0.244688304435 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103897919755 0.084324248473 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0687398470536 0.0667982634062 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169688055769 0.151304729494 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0353232613234 0.056905535591 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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