Some people say music is a good way of bringing people of different culture and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree
The world is getting smaller due to the development of transportation and the Internet, which play a great role of connect people from all over the world. There are opinions that music is also a brilliant method that can create a great bond among people of different culture and ages and I totally adhere to this view.
Firstly, music is a great source of emotional memory. People may have some connections between a certain song with one memorable event in their life and even share that memory with another people. Therefore, whenever one hears that melody on play, one may immediately recall the memory of that event. For instance, “Waka waka”, the official 2010 FIFA World Cup song has become so famous that until now, after more than 10 years, people all over the world can still feel the summer heat and the festive atmosphere of the biggest football competition in the world, and still remember Shakira being the singer who performed the song perfectly.
Secondly, music can convey the emotion and feelings of the composer. Similar to a piece of literature or an envelope of letter, music can deliver a message, a bit of emotion that the composer would like to send through the melodies or the lyrics, hence helps connecting the composer and the receiver. Though still under heated controversy, but many researchers agree that “Für Elise” was a love song that the ingenious music composer Beethoven dedicated for a woman he loved.
Some people may argue that the lyrics in the songs may be in another language, therefore foreign listeners cannot be sure that they fully understand the meaning behind them. However, the opponents may forget that a song contains melodies and rhythms beside lyrics, and the tunes, the notes themselves have already been able to tell a lot of stories. One example of the fact that music has already been successful in bringing people of different countries together is the global phenomenon of BTS. BTS started as a small K-pop group under an almost nameless company, Bighit, but now the seven men have become global stars and have conquered such a fastidious music market of the United States. Their fandom, Army, has members from all regions on the Earth, from Asia to Europe and America; as a result, BTS has held multiple concerts not only in South Korea, their home town, but also in any place where Army presents.
In conclusion, I totally believe that music is an amazing way of narrowing down the distance among people from different nations and backgrounds.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: Waka
...he memory of that event. For instance, “Waka waka”, the official 2010 FIFA World Cup song...
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Line 3, column 260, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to connect' or 'connect'.
Suggestion: to connect; connect
...the melodies or the lyrics, hence helps connecting the composer and the receiver. Though s...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... also in any place where Army presents. In conclusion, I totally believe that mu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, for instance, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 7.30460921844 233% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2093.0 1615.20841683 130% => OK
No of words: 426.0 315.596192385 135% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91314553991 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45992029814 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 176.041082164 140% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.579812206573 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 650.7 506.74238477 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 67.3146508735 49.4020404114 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.533333333 106.682146367 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.4 20.7667163134 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.8 7.06120827912 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191251549356 0.244688304435 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0668055017353 0.084324248473 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0669655188926 0.0667982634062 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113650829568 0.151304729494 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.045840328244 0.056905535591 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 50.2224549098 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 78.4519038076 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.