Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion
Some people give the opinion that listening to music is a good way of connecting people from different cultures and ages together. Whereas many put forward opposite propositions, I hold to the belief that the imperfectness of the music is inevitably far overweigh by the practical benefits. First and foremost, the opinion about “music can not bring to people of different cultures and aged together” is not absolutely right. Although there are some reason for this opinion namely living in different parts of the country in particular and in different countries in general, language barriers can become one of the most difficult challenge of this issue. For example, there are a lot of idols in various areas in Korea which have many fans from different countries, so if the fans want to understand what their idols taking about, they have to study Korean or they just can watch it for fun without understanding. Secondly, now a days, to have become famous on social media, many companies start to do bad things. If in German, people said that the tones of the music are similar the clothes that we wear everyday so there are some companies leave their idols to not wear enough “tones” while they are on shows. And these companies know that can make the views increase so they use that “bad” music to post in the Internet to make more viewers.
On the other hand, whereas there are some disadvantages but the affection of music has more advantages than the opposite side. There are various kind of music exist in the world., every single country has their own music so studying languages and know more about other cultures through the music is a good idea. For instance, in Vietnam, we have Bolero, countryside, V-pop… symbolized for different generations. Therefore, music can also connected people from every ages. Also, the tones of the music are extremely important to control human’s feelings. For example, may be that music is hard to understand because it comes from abroad but the sound and the tone of the music are interesting and happy, it can boot human’s feelings in the positive way.
To recapitulate, while there are many opinions in this issue, I am deeply convinced that music give various benefits for human. Therefore, we should spend more time to learn and enjoyed more in music.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 140, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun put seems to be countable; consider using: 'many puts'.
Suggestion: many puts
...ent cultures and ages together. Whereas many put forward opposite propositions, I hold t...
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Line 1, column 925, Rule ID: NOW_A_DAYS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'nowadays'?
Suggestion: nowadays
...or fun without understanding. Secondly, now a days, to have become famous on social media,...
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Line 1, column 929, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a day' or simply 'days'?
Suggestion: a day; days
...un without understanding. Secondly, now a days, to have become famous on social media,...
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Line 1, column 1106, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...ic are similar the clothes that we wear everyday so there are some companies leave their...
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Line 2, column 145, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'kinds'?
Suggestion: kinds
...an the opposite side. There are various kind of music exist in the world., every sin...
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Line 2, column 438, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'connect'
Suggestion: connect
... generations. Therefore, music can also connected people from every ages. Also, the tones...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, whereas, while, for example, for instance, in general, in particular, kind of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1930.0 1615.20841683 119% => OK
No of words: 393.0 315.596192385 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91094147583 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59904202664 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503816793893 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 617.4 506.74238477 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.4382750791 49.4020404114 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.625 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5625 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.75 7.06120827912 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286154717247 0.244688304435 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104640196851 0.084324248473 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115392760608 0.0667982634062 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180088939566 0.151304729494 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0881174616833 0.056905535591 155% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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