Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together Do you agree or disagree

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Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together Do you agree or disagree

It is often said that music has the power to unite and connect people of regardless of their cultural backgrounds. I totally agree with this point of view
I believe that music is a strong energy, a drug heals the soul and contributes to connect different age-groups. The first reason is that music makes people have young and close soul. For that reason, listening to music help adults get the thinking and mental of their offspring, at the same time, it gives a chance for them to keep up with new trends and creates a comfortable lives. For example, my mother and my aunts usually listen to modern music on radio or TV and they really understand youth termilogy, style of adolescents through music.
Another reason is that music is regarded as cultural ambassador between areas or countries. Music industry is more and more diverse and it creates novelty in cultures and spreads to many places. Therefore, songs enrich people’s knowledge about different cultures and help a country easy to intergrate with international. For example, recently, the singer of Vietnam has gone to China to took part in a music competition. She has been confident to show beautiful aspects of Vietnam such as music commercial, fashion, food and scenery, ect, and they known by a lot of foreign friends.
In conclusion, for the reasons mentioned above, I would argue that music industry would have a positive impact on relationship between age-groups, my country and international with many cultures.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 379, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'life'?
Suggestion: life
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...and international with many cultures.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, really, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1246.0 1615.20841683 77% => OK
No of words: 248.0 315.596192385 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02419354839 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96837696647 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7575810744 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.596774193548 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 379.8 506.74238477 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.053079932 49.4020404114 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.272727273 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5454545455 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.72727272727 7.06120827912 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202561874616 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0841768699409 0.084324248473 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0498135902281 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126069718145 0.151304729494 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.046616824932 0.056905535591 82% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 78.4519038076 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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