Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. Do you agree or disagree?
It is often said that music has the power to unite and connect people, regardless of their cultural backgrounds. I totally agree with this point of view.
I believe that music is a strong energy, a drug heals the soul, and contributes to connect different age groups. The first reason is that music makes people have a young and close soul. For that reason, listening to music helps adults get the thinking and mental of their offspring, at the same time, it gives them a chance to keep up with new trends and creates comfortable lives. For example, my mother and my aunts usually listen to modern music on the radio or TV and they really understand the youth termilogy and style of adolescents through music.
Another reason is that music is regarded as a cultural ambassador between areas or countries. The music industry is becoming more diverse and it creates novelty in cultures and spreads to many places. Therefore, songs enrich people’s knowledge about different cultures and help a country integrate with the international. For example, recently, a singer from Vietnam has gone to China to take part in a music competition. She has been confident to show beautiful aspects of Vietnam such as music commercial, fashion, food and scenery, ect, and they known by a lot of foreign friends. In conclusion, for the reasons mentioned above, I would argue that the music industry would have a positive impact on relationships between age groups, my country and international with many cultures.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... and international with many cultures.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, really, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1254.0 1615.20841683 78% => OK
No of words: 252.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97619047619 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98428260373 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71019835198 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.603174603175 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 382.5 506.74238477 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.9491450638 49.4020404114 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.5 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.16666666667 7.06120827912 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190859001557 0.244688304435 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.07395160242 0.084324248473 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0406057025252 0.0667982634062 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126166668691 0.151304729494 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.023838375892 0.056905535591 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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