Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion

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Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

It is often said that music has the power to connect people, regardless of cultural backgrounds or ages. I completely agree with this view, and will give my reasons below.

Music can certainly unite people. The best example of this would be the events which were held back in 1980s in the US and the UK simultaneously and its objective was to raise money for famine . These would be a huge success in terms of the number of people watched them and the public awareness for famine. They demonstrated, I believe, music would be a global language to bring people together.

As music transcend cultures, it would connect people in terms of their ages. All people enjoy strong rhythm, beautiful songs and it create the same magical effect on all of us, and it appeal to children, parents and grandparents alike. The best example of this would the the “X-factor” and “The Voice”, these are two popular programmes in the prime-time show and were broadcast globally. I agure that there is no other form of entertainment can bring family together like this, music is as a global language.

In conclusion, I believe in music’s capacity to bring people together as a planet’s global language, irrespective culture or age.

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Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 101, Rule ID: IN_1990s[1]
Message: The article is probably missing here: 'in the 1980s'.
Suggestion: in the 1980s
...ould be the events which were held back in 1980s in the US and the UK simultaneously and...
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Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... objective was to raise money for famine . These would be a huge success in terms ...
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Line 6, column 133, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'creates'?
Suggestion: creates
...y strong rhythm, beautiful songs and it create the same magical effect on all of us, a...
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Line 6, column 185, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'appeals'?
Suggestion: appeals
...ame magical effect on all of us, and it appeal to children, parents and grandparents a...
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Line 6, column 268, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...s alike. The best example of this would the the “X-factor” and “The Voice”, these are t...
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Line 6, column 268, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...s alike. The best example of this would the the “X-factor” and “The Voice”, these are t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, as to, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 41.998997996 64% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1025.0 1615.20841683 63% => OK
No of words: 208.0 315.596192385 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92788461538 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.79765784423 4.20363070211 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76726325649 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 127.0 176.041082164 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.610576923077 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 313.2 506.74238477 62% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.7479663184 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.1818181818 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9090909091 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.54545454545 7.06120827912 36% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246063038778 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0951923361544 0.084324248473 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0654771756862 0.0667982634062 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16429122641 0.151304729494 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0564495912793 0.056905535591 99% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 78.4519038076 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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