Some people say that outdoor activities bring benefits to children’s development rather than playing computer games. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In contemporary society, many people argue that playing outdoor activities will more helpful for children’s development while playing computer games do not bring any advantages for them. Personally, I completely agree with this view.
There are several reasons why outdoor activities are good for children’s development. One reason is that they make children fitter and stronger as individuals. Children who play these games are healthier and they are also less likely attend antisocial activities. Furthermore, outdoor activities require a lot of participants to play. For example, children who play football or basketball, they can learn several social and management skills. They can also share and work as the part of the team.
Apart from the practical benefits expressed above, I believe that playing computer games have negative effects for children's growth for two reasons. Firstly, kids will spend a lot of time to play indoor games. It will lead to several health problems like heart disease and obesity. Secondly, these children will find it hard to interact with others. When they surfer on the internet, they are more likely to be exposed to unsuitable materials on the internet. All of these factors can have a negative impact on their physical and mental well-being.
In conclusion, for the reasons I have mentioned above, I strongly believe that playing outdoor games will help children keep more healthy and improve social skills. Parents should limit the quantity of children’s time to play computer games and encourage their children go outside and make new friends.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 144, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[3]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
... they make children fitter and stronger as individuals. Children who play these ga...
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Line 2, column 405, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun social seems to be countable; consider using: 'several socials'.
Suggestion: several socials
... football or basketball, they can learn several social and management skills. They can share a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, second, secondly, so, well, while, apart from, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 41.998997996 57% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1342.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 250.0 315.596192385 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.368 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97635364384 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72453739193 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.588 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 405.9 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.9511904589 49.4020404114 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.875 106.682146367 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.625 20.7667163134 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.75 7.06120827912 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.257747306488 0.244688304435 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0830902134131 0.084324248473 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0796322485845 0.0667982634062 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182815182937 0.151304729494 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0780929419395 0.056905535591 137% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 50.2224549098 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.57 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 78.4519038076 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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