Some people say that schools should concentrate on teaching students academic subjects that will be useful for their future careers. Other people say that subjects such as music and sports are also necessary.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Although it is believed that schools should focus on disciplines like maths, physics, biology that will be useful for student's occupations in the future, some argue that courses like sports and music also play a major role in schools. I agree with the latter view.
On the one hand, it is easy to understand why numerous people argue that scholastic subjects are vital. To begin with, the crucial reason is that intellectual subjects have boosted a multitude of skills such as problem-solving abilities, logical thinking skills, and time management skills, which are essential factors to applying for a well-paid occupation. To illustrate, candidates for a famous multinational corporation with a high salary called Samsung, which is headquartered in South Korea, must do the paper examination with lots of situational, logical, and quick calculation questions. Normally, if the applicants do not study academic subjects, they will not pass this test. Furthermore, the foremost goal of learners is to get a job to make a living after graduating.
On the other hand, subjects like sports and music are also indispensable. Initially, learning this syllabus can enhance a student's health and good mood, therefore increasing learning efficiency. For instance, Foreign Trade University in Viet Nam is well-known for organizing several sports tournaments and music events. By virtue of these activities, students here are known as becoming significantly happier and more resilient to learn the other activities in class, and they achieve quite high GPA scores compared to students from other schools. Besides, un-scholastic subjects also stimulate creativity, improve their communication, and socialization. These are the skills that most recruitments are looking for in applicants, apart from specialized knowledge these days.
In conclusion, there is no doubt that not only academic subjects but also other subjects like music and sport are very important for future jobs that students should be taught simultaneously in the school.
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- Some people say that schools should concentrate on teaching students academic subjects that will be useful for their future careers Other people say that subjects such as music and sports are also necessary Discuss both views and give your own opinion 84
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 123, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, furthermore, if, look, so, therefore, well, apart from, for instance, in conclusion, no doubt, such as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1756.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 314.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.5923566879 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08467727384 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.624203821656 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 532.8 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.3706883131 49.4020404114 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.428571429 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4285714286 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.1428571429 7.06120827912 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.3107903085 0.244688304435 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0967236533771 0.084324248473 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0877723910147 0.0667982634062 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.200243531193 0.151304729494 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0770548596603 0.056905535591 135% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.0946893788 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.44 12.4159519038 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.35 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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