Some people say that what children watch on TV influences their behaviour while others say the amount of time children they spend watching Tv influences their behavior most. discuss both views and give your opinion
Many people believe that the content of television has the biggest impact on children’s behaviors, whereas others believe that it is the amount of time they spend watching television that affects them the most. Personally I would argue that it is the television’s content that has the strongest influence on the way children behave.
On the one hand, it is beyond the question that spending too much time on television will get youngsters addicted to it. Firstly, television is likely to be the biggest obstacle that distracts kids from concentrating on their studying. Children, due to their mischievous nature, tend to prefer wasting their time on all the sources of entertainment including television, phone, computer rather than focusing on their assignments or homework. As a result, those that are addicted to television seem to frequently receive bad grades at school. Secondly, excessive television watching blocks children from the outside world. As far as I am concerned, spending a huge amount of time on television may impair children’s social skills as they would choose to stick their eyes on the television screen over communicating or taking part in other outdoor activities with their parents or other kids at the same age. Eventually, these children may hinder their development of social skills and may suffer from detrimental physical health when they grow up.
On the other hand, I believe that the broadcasted image also has some outweighed disadvantages. The first drawback is that television programs these days usually display inappropriate materials for young viewers such as movies that contain violence, music videos offer nudity or contain lyrics that mention sexual behaviors, drugs abuse, etc. therefore, kids who watch these unsuitable programs on television are more likely to be influenced in an improper way and consequently, they would try to imitate what they have watched. Another point is that there are also a wide range of commercial advertisements on television which may cause some negative effects on children. For example, if a child accidentally watches an advertisement about an appealing toy or a new kind of fast food, they will keep pestering their parents to buy it for them impulsively.
In conclusion, although both views certainly have some validity, it seems to me that it is the content of television that has the most negative effect on children. I therefore would suggest that parents should control the amount of time their kids spend on television and try to make sure what they are watching is appropriate.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, whereas, for example, in conclusion, kind of, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 7.30460921844 260% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 50.0 24.0651302605 208% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2175.0 1615.20841683 135% => OK
No of words: 413.0 315.596192385 131% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26634382567 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50803742585 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99426761316 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 176.041082164 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53995157385 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 662.4 506.74238477 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.1064835826 49.4020404114 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.9375 106.682146367 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8125 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.1875 7.06120827912 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.28896177771 0.244688304435 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0986865611833 0.084324248473 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0605358570477 0.0667982634062 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198681879032 0.151304729494 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0398779221722 0.056905535591 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 78.4519038076 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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