Some people say that what children watch on TV influences their behaviour while others say the amount of time children they spend watching Tv influences their behavior.

There has always been controversy as regards whether or not children watch television which affected their behavior. While some people are against this practice, I am strongly opinion that both of these factors can have an impact on a child's bahaviour, especialy when the two factors are combined
Firstly, over the last decade or two, there has been a steady increase in the amount of inappropriate content that has been allowed to be televised. Television programmes and commercials these days are full of graphic violence, sex scenes and sexual connotations, amongst other topics that are considered unsuitable for children’s viewing. Even cartoon programmes these day are full of violence. Young children are the most affected by this issue due to the fact that they are still learing and developing ideas about the world. Being exposed to such content can negatively shape their views and personal relationships, and therefore affect their behavior.

However, not only does the content of what children watch affect their behavior but also how much time they spend watching television. In most modern societies it is very common for young children to spend hours of their day with their eyes glued to the television screen. Many children watch television as soon as they wake up in the morning and as soon as they come home from school. Many parents even consider the television to be like a baby-sitter, something to keep their children occupied. Unfortunately, this has many detrimental effects on children’s behavior, the primary reason being that most children suffer from a severe lack of outdoor activity and exercise, which are viatl for a child’s well-being and development.

In conclusion, I believe that both what children watch and how much time they spend watching television can impact their behavious. Governing authorites should consider more stringent regulations when it comes to television programme content and parents need to be more careful about how much time their children spend watching television everyday to avoid the negative implications that it can have their children’s behaviour.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 46, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
... has always been controversy as regards whether or not children watch television which affecte...
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Line 2, column 370, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this day' or 'these days'?
Suggestion: this day; these days
...apos;s viewing. Even cartoon programmes these day are full of violence. Young children ar...
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Line 6, column 340, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...heir children spend watching television everyday to avoid the negative implications that...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, so, still, therefore, well, while, as regards, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1808.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 336.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38095238095 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89938392666 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53869047619 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 546.3 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 77.4548541918 49.4020404114 157% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.076923077 106.682146367 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8461538462 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.38461538462 7.06120827912 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.341269624101 0.244688304435 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.140891243813 0.084324248473 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0960898529432 0.0667982634062 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.217721664613 0.151304729494 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0760461182527 0.056905535591 134% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.22 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 9.78957915832 204% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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