Some people suggest that children do not understand the world of work and schools should make all teenagers spend a short time working as well as studying academic subjects. To what extent do you agree?
It is believed that adolescents lack work experience and soft skills and they should do some placements beside taking compulsory subjects. I completely agree with this point of view.
To begin with, deficiencies in social knowledge and employability has been a dominant obstacle for students. The first issue is that the young relies a lot on theories at school which is quiet old and has not been updated for a few years. As a result, what they applied to their jobs may not have exact accuracy and there will be a lot of troubles they have to meet, especially, in some fields such as marketing, law or politics. The second cause for the shortage of work understanding is that juniors do not have enough transferable skills for their work. There is no or very few teachers can teach them how to communicate, have a good teamwork or develop their problem solving skills as well as students themselves explore.
As a consequence, there is a suggestion for education systems that their learners should be trained through internship, and continuously sharpen their academic performance. Initially, after work placement, they will have a chance to expand their social circle of friends and make a significant improvement in professional skills, resulting in more opportunities for students when they graduate. Besides, it is also a measure they can revise their lessons in practical when they use it at work. Another point worth noting is experience in companies, offices may determine the best suitable occupation for pupils and detect their weakness which should be enhanced in the future. Particularly, universities in the UK often encourage applicants to have some work experience and share their time during those jobs related to why they choose those majors for their future careers and write it in their personal statements.
In conclusion, to tackle the low-quality of graduate employees, I agree that educators should take steps and spiritually stimulate the young generation to experience workplaces during their schools.
- Many foods are shipped from far away Some people think that eating local food is good environmentally and economically Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages 84
- Rich countries often give money to poorer countries but it does not solve poverty Therefore developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid To what extent do you agree or disagree 89
- Some people suggest that children do not understand the world of work and schools should make all teenagers spend a short time working as well as studying academic subjects To what extent do you agree 84
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 567, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...ferable skills for their work. There is no or very few teachers can teach them how...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, if, may, second, so, well, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1705.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 328.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19817073171 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93792200508 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.576219512195 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 518.4 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.2422667758 49.4020404114 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.153846154 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2307692308 20.7667163134 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.53846153846 7.06120827912 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15121331624 0.244688304435 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0582340948367 0.084324248473 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0505079212482 0.0667982634062 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0998510567651 0.151304729494 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0422254779298 0.056905535591 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.31 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 567, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...ferable skills for their work. There is no or very few teachers can teach them how...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, if, may, second, so, well, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1705.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 328.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19817073171 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93792200508 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.576219512195 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 518.4 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.2422667758 49.4020404114 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.153846154 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2307692308 20.7667163134 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.53846153846 7.06120827912 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15121331624 0.244688304435 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0582340948367 0.084324248473 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0505079212482 0.0667982634062 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0998510567651 0.151304729494 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0422254779298 0.056905535591 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.31 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.