Some people think that children should be encouraged to play outdoor games that require physical activit instead of playing computer games in the home. Do you agree or disagree?
Nowdays, the implication of children playing computer games at home has been widely discussed. Some people argue that children should attend outdoor games instead of playing computer games. I mostly agree with the argument.
On one hand, computer games has a number of benefits to children. To begin with, it is important for children to learn computer related skills because the computer technology has became a significant trend in our society. Children will be very interested in computers when they are attracted by computer games. Furthermore, computer games, especially those has education functions, can promote children's brain development. For example, many children learn drawing and music composing through the aid of computer games.
On the other hand, there are many arguments supporting that outdoor activities cannot be replaced by computer games. First, playing computer games have some negative effects on children's physical health. For example, playing computer games for a long time will hurt their eyes and back. Also, playing computer games may lead to overweight and obesity. Second, social skills is important for children to be successful in the future. Playing with real friends effectively helps children to grasp social skills.
In conclusion, outdoor activities is more beneficial to children than computer games. Therefore, children should be encouraged to attend more outdoor activities with friends.
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computer games has a number of benefits
computer games have a number of benefits
Sentence: To begin with, it is important for children to learn computer related skills because the computer technology has became a significant trend in our society.
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computer games, especially those has education functions,
computer games, especially those have education functions,
playing computer games have some negative effects
playing computer games has some negative effects
social skills is important for children
social skills are important for children
outdoor activities is more beneficial
outdoor activities are more beneficial
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