Some people think that children should be taught to be competitive in school. Others,
however, say that cooperation and team working skills are more important. Discuss both
sides and give your opinion.
Although it is sometimes thought that schools ought to teach children to compete, other people
believe that the focus should be on cooperation. In my opinion, deciding whether to focus on
competition or team working skills should depend on the age of the child.
On the one hand, children who learn to compete against each other often do better in school,
according to some. In other words, the competition between students motivates them to excel in
their studies or tasks which consequently produces better academic performance and results.
Furthermore, it is commonly believed that these skills are essential for children to learn in order to
succeed later in life when they must compete against others in the job market.
On the other hand, it is often thought that it is better if the emphasis at school is on cooperating
with others. People do not live, work or socialise apart from others, so learning how to work
alongside others ought to be taught from childhood. Without these skills, many think children would
lack the ability to communicate with each other or know how to deal with confrontations and
conflicts in a constructive way.
Finally, in my view, both skills are indispensable for a child’s future but the focus should depend on a
child’s age. While young children need to learn how to communicate effectively and learn to work
with others, older children, who are starting to take exams and be assessed on their academic
performance, would benefit more from competition. Schools, therefore, need to be flexible as to
when to focus on one over the other.
In conclusion, despite people having different views, I believe it would be better for young children
to develop team working skills and older children to become more competitive.
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...deal with confrontations and conflicts in a constructive way. Finally, in my view, both skills are ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, finally, furthermore, if, so, therefore, while, apart from, as to, in conclusion, in my opinion, in my view, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1508.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 293.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14675767918 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78275692341 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.522184300341 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 446.4 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 4.76152304609 273% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.7566302571 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.666666667 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4166666667 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.4166666667 7.06120827912 190% => OK
Paragraphs: 20.0 4.38176352705 456% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.293144608048 0.244688304435 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111156388224 0.084324248473 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0676346292496 0.0667982634062 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0842211230785 0.151304729494 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0655932455525 0.056905535591 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 50.2224549098 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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