Some people think that children should be taught to be competitive in school. Others,
however, say that cooperation and team working skills are more important. Discuss both
sides.
People have different perspectives on whether schools ought to focus on teaching children to
compete or work together as a team. While some people think that competition is more important,
others consider that it is better for children to learn to cooperate with each other.
Children who learn to compete against each other often do better in school, according to some. In
other words, the competition between students motivates them to excel in their studies or tasks
which consequently produces better academic performance and results. For example, students
generally apply themselves and work harder when they are in direct competition with their
classmates. Furthermore, it is commonly believed that being driven to achieve the best is vital in
order to succeed later in life when, as adults, they must compete against others in the job market.
On the other hand, it is often thought that it is better if the emphasis at school is on cooperating
with others in a team. People do not live, work or socialise apart from others, so learning how to
work alongside others ought to be taught from childhood. Without these skills, children would lack
the ability to communicate with each other or know how to deal with confrontations and conflicts in
a constructive way. Another reason why team skills are useful for children is that they can learn how
to negotiate with others to complete a task which are useful skills to have for their future.
In conclusion, many people think that children need to become more competitive, whereas others
think that it is best for a child to focus on working together.
- The diagrams below show the life cycle of the silkworm and the stages in the production of silk cloth.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 56
- The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011 67
- The plans below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment. 73
- The graph below compares the changes in the birth rates of China and the USA between 1920 and 2000. 78
- The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. 78
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 13, column 98, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a constructive way" with adverb for "constructive"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... deal with confrontations and conflicts in a constructive way. Another reason why team skills are use...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, furthermore, if, so, whereas, while, apart from, for example, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1366.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 269.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0780669145 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0498419064 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65945055809 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 176.041082164 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.531598513011 0.561755894193 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 405.9 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 26.3799322677 49.4020404114 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 124.181818182 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4545454545 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.81818181818 7.06120827912 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 17.0 4.38176352705 388% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264224975561 0.244688304435 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107770142789 0.084324248473 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0680502045077 0.0667982634062 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0898634407852 0.151304729494 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0806708294626 0.056905535591 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.0946893788 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 50.2224549098 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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