The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010

Essay topics:

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010

The given bar graph illustrates the proportion of Australian male and female in the different groups of age who used to do physical activity in 2010.
An overall trend, the youngest male did physical activity more than the youngest female. Conversely, the older women did physical activity more than older men.
For male, the age group from 15 to 24 did physical activity by 52.8%. whereas, the rate declined significantly to 39.5% for age group 35 to 44. Then this proportion increased to 46.7% for men who their age 65 and over.
For female, the percentage of physical activity for age group 15 to 24 was 47.7%, which was less than the same age group for male. Then the proportion went up steadily to 53.3% for age group 45 to 54, which was more than by 10.2% for the same age group for male. Lastly, for age group 65 and above, the percentage was 47.1%, which was more than by 1.4% for the same age group of male

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Average: 8.2 (3 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
conversely, if, lastly, then, whereas

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 33.7804878049 62% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 753.0 965.302439024 78% => OK
No of words: 168.0 196.424390244 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.48214285714 4.92477711251 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.60020574368 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.32389216042 2.65546596893 88% => OK
Unique words: 76.0 106.607317073 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.452380952381 0.547539520022 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 225.0 283.868780488 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.33902439024 184% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 3.36585365854 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.8332816056 43.030603864 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.6666666667 112.824112599 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6666666667 22.9334400587 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.11111111111 5.23603664747 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.09268292683 195% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.316842214696 0.215688989381 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.169821373653 0.103423049105 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0835302163744 0.0843802449381 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.234361923465 0.15604864568 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0780663736056 0.0819641961636 95% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 13.2329268293 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 78.59 61.2550243902 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.3012195122 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.7 11.4140731707 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.69 8.06136585366 83% => OK
difficult_words: 23.0 40.7170731707 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.4329268293 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 11.0658536585 63% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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