Some people think that cultural traditions may be destroyed when they are used as
money-making attractions aimed at tourists. Others believe it is the only way to save
these traditions. Discuss on both sides and give your opinion.
t is irrefutable that cultural traditions attract tourists from all over the world and develop
local economy. Some individuals are of the opinion that these may be destroyed if they are
modified to attract tourists. Others, however, hold the view that if we don’t use them for
tourism, they will die. In the following paragraphs, I shall discuss both sides of the argument.
We have to make these cultural traditions alluring for tourists because we need tourists.
Firstly, tourism boosts our economy and secondly we get a chance to spread our culture to
different countries. If our artists and artisans do not earn money from their art, which
depicts our culture and tradition, then this art will die off and we’ll only be the losers.
Tourism is the backbone of any country’s economy and every country does their effort to
attract tourists. Many people depend on tourism for their livelihood. People in the food
industry, hotel industry and transport industry depend on tourism. Presentation is very
important to attract visitors and to present nicely, some change is inevitable.
On the other hand, when cultural traditions are used as money-making attractions, they
lose their original features. Sometimes it makes cultural traditions disappear altogether.
However, I believe that culture and tradition are deep rooted and minor superficial changes
cannot harm them in any way. Change is the law of nature and all we should look into is that
the changes are made with caution to retain the inherent elements of culture.
To put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying that, to save cultural traditions we need to make
some changes to make them alluring to the tourist of today. If we don’t do so we’ll lose our
cultural traditions altogether and we’ll lose our tourists also.
- The detailed description about crime will affect the people and cause many social problems Some people say that the media should be strictly controlled Do you agree or disagree 79
- Some people think that cultural traditions may be destroyed when they are used as money-making attractions aimed at tourists. Others believe it is the only way to save these traditions. Discuss on both sides and give your opinion. 67
- Nowadays, people get information through news and papers, but meanwhile are uncertain about the truth of these news. Should we believe the journalists? What qualities should a good journalist or correspondent have? 73
- The advantages brought by the spread of English as a global language will outweigh the disadvantages To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view 68
- Pressure on the school and university students is increasing and students are pushed to hard work when they are young Do you think it is a positive or negative development 69
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: T
t is irrefutable that cultural traditions...
^
Line 1, column 95, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ists from all over the world and develop local economy. Some individuals are of t...
^^^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Local
... from all over the world and develop local economy. Some individuals are of the op...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 91, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... that these may be destroyed if they are modified to attract tourists. Others, ho...
^^^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Modified
...t these may be destroyed if they are modified to attract tourists. Others, however, h...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 96, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... view that if we don't use them for tourism, they will die. In the following...
^^^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Tourism
...w that if we don't use them for tourism, they will die. In the following paragr...
^^^^^^^
Line 11, column 90, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...we get a chance to spread our culture to different countries. If our artists and ...
^^^^
Line 13, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Different
...et a chance to spread our culture to different countries. If our artists and artisans ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 13, column 89, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... do not earn money from their art, which depicts our culture and tradition, then ...
^^^^
Line 15, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Depicts
...not earn money from their art, which depicts our culture and tradition, then this ar...
^^^^^^^
Line 17, column 93, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...y and every country does their effort to attract tourists. Many people depend on ...
^^^^
Line 19, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Attract
...d every country does their effort to attract tourists. Many people depend on tourism...
^^^^^^^
Line 19, column 89, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...for their livelihood. People in the food industry, hotel industry and transport i...
^^^^
Line 21, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Industry
...their livelihood. People in the food industry, hotel industry and transport industry ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 21, column 88, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... depend on tourism. Presentation is very important to attract visitors and to pre...
^^^^
Line 23, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Important
...end on tourism. Presentation is very important to attract visitors and to present nice...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 25, column 87, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e used as money-making attractions, they lose their original features. Sometimes ...
^^^^
Line 27, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Lose
...ed as money-making attractions, they lose their original features. Sometimes it m...
^^^^
Line 29, column 92, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...eep rooted and minor superficial changes cannot harm them in any way. Change is t...
^^^^
Line 31, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Cannot
...rooted and minor superficial changes cannot harm them in any way. Change is the law...
^^^^^^
Line 31, column 93, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ture and all we should look into is that the changes are made with caution to ret...
^^^^
Line 33, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
... and all we should look into is that the changes are made with caution to retain...
^^^
Line 35, column 93, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...save cultural traditions we need to make some changes to make them alluring to th...
^^^^
Line 37, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Some
... cultural traditions we need to make some changes to make them alluring to the to...
^^^^
Line 37, column 103, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... we don't do so we'll lose our cultural traditions altogether and we&ap...
^^^^
Line 39, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Cultural
...don't do so we'll lose our cultural traditions altogether and we'll lo...
^^^^^^^^
Line 39, column 65, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...gether and we'll lose our tourists also.
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, then, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 24.0651302605 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1563.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 296.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28040540541 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7703279493 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.554054054054 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 469.8 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.0289364484 49.4020404114 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.9411764706 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4117647059 20.7667163134 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.35294117647 7.06120827912 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 20.0 4.38176352705 456% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 28.0 5.01903807615 558% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284669940334 0.244688304435 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0991661697695 0.084324248473 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.086656418765 0.0667982634062 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0907505977989 0.151304729494 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0810899212641 0.056905535591 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.