Some people think that the government is responsible for looking after the elderly Others believe that it is the role of individuals Who do you think should take responsibility for

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Some people think that the government is responsible for looking after the elderly. Others believe that it is the role of individuals. Who do you think should take responsibility for?

On one hand, government should help the aged citizens because when they were young, they already had to pay for taxes, health care services and daily payments, and now as having grow old, they deserve special treatment. Salary for the retirered is very low which now not enough to pay for their own essential needs. Furthermore, there are (a few) people who decided to be single their whole life which means they have no (other) income when they are old and the government should support them.
On the other hand, those people (who) had spent many decades to save money for the future, can absolutely take care of themselves. To illustrate this point of view, there are many old millionares like Bill Gates or Steve Jobs who worked so hard and knew how to save use money reasonably so when they get older, they can still handle to pay things for themselves. What is more, instead of using money to help the elderly, the government can spend those money to develop other facilities like school or hospital which are useful to everyone, not only the elderly. Without the financial burden of the aged people, the government can also have more fund to solve other problems of the society.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 33, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: had
... them. On the other hand, those people had had many decades to save the money to use i...
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Line 2, column 79, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...d many decades to save the money to use in future, which means they can absolutely take c...
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Line 2, column 387, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this money' or 'those moneys', 'those monies'?
Suggestion: this money; those moneys; those monies
...ily. What is more, government can spend those money to develop other facilities like school...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, so, still, kind of, what is more, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 41.998997996 48% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 964.0 1615.20841683 60% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 210.0 315.596192385 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.59047619048 5.12529762239 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.80675409584 4.20363070211 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.20111289106 2.80592935109 78% => OK
Unique words: 127.0 176.041082164 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.604761904762 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 312.3 506.74238477 62% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1610668218 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.111111111 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3333333333 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.55555555556 7.06120827912 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 2.0 4.38176352705 46% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135218976654 0.244688304435 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0641003954063 0.084324248473 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0257416072967 0.0667982634062 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104992943421 0.151304729494 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0193003988362 0.056905535591 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.0946893788 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.64 12.4159519038 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.41 8.58950901804 86% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 78.4519038076 45% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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