Some people think that government is responsible for the rise in obesity in children.
Do you agree or disagree?
I believe that government takes the huge responsibility for the increase of obesity in children because they can build many public facilities such as sport arenas. However, I do not totally agree since parents should be more aware of the issue.
Admittedly, the government automatically takes a part in diet issues in kids because they can easily support with many sports buildings that would be useful for them. That is to say, reducing the overweight problem can be done if many sports facilities are easy to access especially when it does not have to pay. For example, almost all children in a country with a developed economy have a healthy habit of doing exercise because that nation has a public gymnasium as well as a swimming pool to lose their weight.
However, responsibility for the government is not enough to tackle the disease as long as parents do not have awareness of their children's health because they are more close. This is because parents tend easily to control their healthy meals, so rarely do kids have a tendency to eat fast food. For instance, kids will not have a preference for fast food such as fried chicken and also pizza to eat if they are more likely to choose home-cooking from their mother.
In conclusion, the rise of obesity in children can be handled with amenities from the government as well as controlling healthy food from parents. If these measures can be successfully carried out, it is likely that obesity rates will decline significantly.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, so, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as well as, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 10.4138276553 10% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1241.0 1615.20841683 77% => OK
No of words: 254.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88582677165 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99216450694 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70635144589 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 176.041082164 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.527559055118 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 399.6 506.74238477 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 33.7521851144 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.1 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4 20.7667163134 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.6 7.06120827912 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211647551371 0.244688304435 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0914936584727 0.084324248473 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0627996489944 0.0667982634062 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143068419257 0.151304729494 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.04922916315 0.056905535591 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 78.4519038076 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, so, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as well as, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 10.4138276553 10% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1241.0 1615.20841683 77% => OK
No of words: 254.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88582677165 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99216450694 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70635144589 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 176.041082164 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.527559055118 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 399.6 506.74238477 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 33.7521851144 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.1 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4 20.7667163134 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.6 7.06120827912 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211647551371 0.244688304435 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0914936584727 0.084324248473 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0627996489944 0.0667982634062 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143068419257 0.151304729494 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.04922916315 0.056905535591 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 78.4519038076 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.