There is an increasing concern over the individual’s lifestyle should be changed by governments or being controlled by themselves. Both views will be discussed before my conclusion.
It is undoubtedly that an individual should be responsible for their own ways to live. This helps them feels freedom and gets rid of anxiety about being controlled. For example, some people prefer playing sports to improve their body strengths, while others maintain weight by engaging in a healthy diet. Even though these kinds of activities may have some negative effects such as being injured or becoming too skinny, but it still their decisions and they should be responsible for this instead of the authorities. Moreover, it seems unrealistic if governments must be involved in each person lifestyle. For instance, a sedentary lifestyle of children should be the responsibility of parents and families. The governments can not make any significant improvement if the parents do not discourage their kids to stop eating junk foods due to their lacking of work-life balance.
On the other hand, governments play an important role in changing some unhealthy lifestyle which may pose a threat to communities. For instance, while smoking in a public area has more negative effects on other innocent people than smokers, alcoholic as well as being addicted to drugs affect adversely to entire generations. Therefore, governments should publish more stringent policies to mitigate these public problems. Furthermore, the government should also adjust the national budget to educate and raise awareness to lower level people in choosing the ways they live. It will not only helps improve people’s health but also prevents residents from serious diseases in the future.
In conclusion, while choosing the way one lives should be a personal decision, governments should be responsible for those who cause negative effects on the communities.
- Some people think it is more important for government to spend public money on promoting healthy lifestyle in order to prevent illness than to spend it on the treatment of people who are already ill. To what extent do you agree or disagree? 61
- Some people think that men and women have different qualities. Therefore, some certain jobs are suitable for men and some jobs are suitable for women. To what extent do you agree or disagree? 73
- Cycling is more environmentally friendly than other forms of transport. Why is it not popular in many places? And how to increase its popularity? 67
- Some people say that government should increase the tax on petrol in order to decrease traffic and pollution. Do you agree with this opinion? 84
- The pie charts show the proportion of the energy produced from different sources in a country between 1985 and 2003. 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 620, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... in each person lifestyle. For instance, a sedentary lifestyle of children should...
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Line 7, column 593, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'will' requires base form of the verb: 'help'
Suggestion: help
...ng the ways they live. It will not only helps improve people's health but also p...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, may, moreover, so, still, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1647.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 300.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.49 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01066806909 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.61 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 498.6 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.1208441543 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.8 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5333333333 7.06120827912 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.307071865049 0.244688304435 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107058280248 0.084324248473 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.076836014373 0.0667982634062 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209302217005 0.151304729494 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0374050846937 0.056905535591 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.56 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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