Some people think that governments should change the way individuals live, while others believe they should choose the way themselves. Discuss these both points of view and give your opinion?
There is an increasing concern over the individual’s lifestyle should be changed by governments or being controlled by themselves. Both views will be discussed before my conclusion.
It is undoubtedly that an individual should be responsible for their own ways to live. This helps them feels freedom and gets rid of anxiety about being controlled. For example, some people play sports to improve their body strengths, while others maintain weigh by engaging in a healthy diet. Even though these kinds of activities may have some negative effects such as being injured or becoming too skinny, but it still their decisions and they should be responsible for this instead of the authorities. Moreover, children obesity which is caused by having a sedentary lifestyle is the responsibility of parents and families. The governments can not make any significant improvement if their parents continuously feed junk foods to their offsprings due to the lacks of work-life balance.
On the other hand, governments play an important role in changing some unhealthy lifestyle which may pose a threat to communities. For instance, while smoking in a public area has more negative effects on other innocent people than smokers, alcoholic as well as being addicted to drugs affect adversely to entire generations. Therefore, governments should publish more stringent policies to mitigate these public problems. Furthermore, the government should adjust the national budget to educate and raise awareness to lower level people in choosing the ways they live. It not only helps improve people’s health but also prevents people from serious diseases in the future.
In conclusion, while choosing the way one lives should be a personal decision, governments should be responsible for those who cause negative effects on the communities.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, may, moreover, so, still, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1556.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 284.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.47887323944 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01264444999 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.612676056338 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 473.4 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.3304813295 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.142857143 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2857142857 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.2857142857 7.06120827912 160% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.320436972194 0.244688304435 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110930083275 0.084324248473 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0808179630274 0.0667982634062 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.210617050729 0.151304729494 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0451463862453 0.056905535591 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.5 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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