Some people claim that museums and art galleries will not be needed because people can see historical objects and works using a computer. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Maintaining museums or art galleries remains a major concern nowadays due to throughout the use of a computer, a person can see any historical objects and works. However, I believe that the existence of such place still plays an important role in the cultural diversity of a country.
Nowadays, arm-chair tourism becomes popular, it is easier for ones today to be able to see the whole world through television or a computer without needed to pay a visit on a destination. In fact, there have already existed numerous programs which content is about life before, how the daily life of our ancestor, what is their problems and some about the war previous centuries. All of them are displayed under vivid images and videos, I have to concede that it was made attractable. However, experiencing an object or event throughout multimedia would never be comparable to travelling to an actual place, by viewing a life-size object and surrounding things. Museums and art galleries aimed their best to serve this, not only a historical object that actually be bequeathed by our prior generation, is exhibited, but they also vividly illustrate how useful it is throughout different activities of our previous generation.
On the other hand, while the main aims of museums or art galleries are served as a national memory bank, it also plays a vital role in the educational purpose about country’s custom and culture. In fact, such places attract lots of tourists. It is an initial destination for those who want to explore the history and culture of the visited country. In addition, some museums also collaborate with local people to tell real stories about their grandfather lives, who deeply understand their ancestors. No images nor videos is capable to convey such things. On the other hand, these places can also be served as a destination for weekend family trips where parents can teach their children what our ancestors have done and been sacrificed to keep our peaceful life, which helps them realize how expensive the war is, and such mistake should not be repeated in their future.
In conclusion, although the benefits brought by the advancement of technology in the sense of appreciation for historical works cannot be ignored, maintaining museums and art galleries still have some advantage for residents to capable to feel a full sense about what our ancestors have done before.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 63, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...urism becomes popular, it is easier for ones today to be able to see the whole world...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, if, so, still, while, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2006.0 1615.20841683 124% => OK
No of words: 395.0 315.596192385 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07848101266 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78616307756 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 176.041082164 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.559493670886 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 636.3 506.74238477 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 79.3029903958 49.4020404114 161% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.285714286 106.682146367 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.2142857143 20.7667163134 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.57142857143 7.06120827912 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222157270725 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.066829704729 0.084324248473 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0708903079235 0.0667982634062 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144471366817 0.151304729494 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0280485686799 0.056905535591 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 13.0946893788 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 50.2224549098 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.3 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 78.4519038076 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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