Some people think high school graduates should travel or work for a period of time instead of going directly to study at university. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of both approaches.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
After graduation for high school students, it is undeniable that they will spend time for traveling or working first before attaining to university. A lot of youths who also determine to have a gap year looking for opportunities to experience of job or waste time on vacation. Activities like these will certainly be very beneficial for those who consciously function their best time, while there are also drawbacks arising from school breaks. In this essay, I will explain about advantages and disadvantages of doing those activities before being a college student and also describe my experience as a high school graduate.
On the one hand, the advantages of travel and work are that young adventurers can gain new experiences before entering higher education. Some of students prefer working for a while in order to deserve a good living and at the same time prepare enough money for tuition fees. Before entering the world of college, this can create complete preparation. For example, I was having a small business with my mother before joining the college. It was really helpful for me to get new experience and try willingly to earn the money. Due to this, many generation will learn about how difficult to making money.
On the other hand, this gap year makes them forget the importance of continuing their lecturing. The teenager might do not care about their university due to that it is already comfortable with their job. Young-aged people realize that by working they earn money, so that, they think school is no longer important. As a result, according to current research, not to attain university could lose the mind-set of being critics, creative and innovative, and it possibly gives them a little chance to face the job field.
To sum up, personally, I do believe that having travel and work before becoming a college student will provide merit for life such as by providing experience. However, the demerit of that is that being too comfortable with their works makes the young people not concern on how important education is.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: After 'Some of', you should use 'the' ('Some of the students') or simply say ''Some students''.
Suggestion: Some of the students; Some students
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun generation seems to be countable; consider using: 'many generations'.
Suggestion: many generations
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, look, really, so, while, for example, such as, as a result, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1710.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 343.0 315.596192385 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98542274052 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68051346667 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.574344023324 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 540.9 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.0290743032 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.875 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4375 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.125 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213388377166 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0690950681664 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.061860948247 0.0667982634062 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123881869946 0.151304729494 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0463423597646 0.056905535591 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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