Some people think the increasing business and cultural contact between countries brings many positive effects. Others say it causes the loss of national identities.Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.Give reasons for your answer and incl

In this era of globalisation, the world is considered to be a global village as trade, tourism, politics, films, music, literature and arts are not restricted within a country’s border. This international business opportunity and cultural exchange surely bring many positive aspects while the negative impacts cannot be ignored as well. This essay delves with these two views and expresses my personal opinion on that.

On one hand, the positive outcomes of cross-cultural activities and international trade are immense. In this age of modern technology and Internet people have access to films, music, arts, language, cultural and many other aspects of other countries. The international trade and business opportunities have helped people all over the world to purchase and sell products at a competitive price and they have far more options nowadays than the past. Crops grown in a distant village or dresses designed by a rural labour have got a world market and this has helped to fight the most vicious problem in the world- hunger. Someone can feel hatred and anger to other nations only if his vision was blurred with the propaganda. For instance, Muslims around the world have a very negative image to the Western people and this could be resolved only by cultural contact. Eventually, people will find that they are all the same apart from their religious and cultural differences. So from this point, it can be inferred that cultural contact between nations can maintain the world peace.

On the other hand, people who are worried about the globalisation, international trade and cultural exchanges opine that this very trend is detrimental to a country’s own culture and tradition. They are right to some extent but I personally believe that culture is ever changing and if people exchange culture, it will not diminish their own culture. Rather it would enrich a country’s own culture. History also teaches us that many cultural and traditional aspects are borrowed from other nations and this has, in fact, a positive impact.

Considering both of these views, I would surmise that protecting our own culture or tradition would depend on us and it would not be harmed from our business relation and cultural contact with other nations. National identities are represented by its citizens and heritage and that is why when citizens of a country would be benefitted from the international business and cross-cultural contacts, they would also be able to highlight their own cultural aspect to the world.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, well, while, apart from, for instance, in fact, all the same, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 10.4138276553 250% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2130.0 1615.20841683 132% => OK
No of words: 409.0 315.596192385 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20782396088 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85422976141 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515892420538 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 671.4 506.74238477 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.9648537067 49.4020404114 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.294117647 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0588235294 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.76470588235 7.06120827912 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219126086145 0.244688304435 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0780328387827 0.084324248473 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0366840550537 0.0667982634062 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141496245157 0.151304729494 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0236821449592 0.056905535591 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 78.4519038076 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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