It is undeniable fact that computer and the internet is playing a vital role in the field of education. It is considered by some that the computer and the internet are important in children's education while other believe that student can learn effectively in schools and with teachers. However, I feel that while modern technologies such as computer and the internet are important in children's learning, this learning should be guided by experienced teachers.
One of the advantage of computers and the internet is availability of information on single click. In other words, going through number of books to find relevant information is time consuming activity. However, the problems are: the information a computer can show needs to be pre-programmed and needs continue updating, for example Encyclopedia on a DVD-ROM; and contrary to popular belief, the internet may not be reliable source of knowledge, since there is often conflicting information available when taken from different sources.
A traditional and long established approach for children is to learn at schools and from experienced teachers. A school is a place where children gather to be educated and learn from each others and as well as from formal educators. At schools, children development is orchestrated stage by stage, step by step by experienced teachers, and their acquisition of knowledge is guided in a systematic way.
I do not believe that it will help students to learn effectively and in long-term manner to overemphasizing the use of computers and the internet. Rather, I feel that modern technologies can complement more classical teaching and learning methods, without being used as a replacement of these traditions.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, so, well, while, for example, i feel, such as, as well as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1445.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 270.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.35185185185 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05360046442 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.15024113432 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 176.041082164 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.537037037037 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 444.6 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.1141801724 49.4020404114 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.363636364 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5454545455 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.27272727273 7.06120827912 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.303891578493 0.244688304435 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127602948839 0.084324248473 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116950054292 0.0667982634062 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184389948679 0.151304729494 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.12117825156 0.056905535591 213% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.0946893788 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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