Nowadays, there is increasing concern over the government spending on medical system. While some people think that the nation budget should be spent on promoting healthy lifestyle to prevent illness, others argue that the government should use this public money to cure ill people. In my opinion, I agree with the former idea which encourages people to have a healthy lifestyle is the best way to improve the citizen’s health.
To begin with, by raising the citizen’s awareness about the healthy lifestyle, an individual would have a responsibility to their own health. For instance, nowadays, the cleanliness and prestigious in food manufacture become the main priority in the decision of an individual’s choice. Moreover, a campaign about having an unhealthy lifestyle also lead to some common serious diseases such as obesity, heart and lungs diseases. As a result, the number of juveniles and young adults use cigarettes and alcohol also witnessed a remarkable decrease. Besides, the government also need to adjust the budget to construct more public park and sports centre to encourage the citizen do more exercise on their daily basis.
On the other hand, although there is a significant increase in the demand for the medical treatment for each individual, the money expense on these treatments is considerably large. The government do have a certain fund to fulfil this need by encouraging the citizen to engage in national insurance. Thus, in my opinion, the government should invest more money in medical research to create more efficient treatment method or vaccine to immunize children for preventing illness rather than curing only a small group of patients.
In conclusion, I personally believe that the government should be more concerned with promoting healthy lifestyle.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rned with promoting healthy lifestyle.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, if, moreover, so, thus, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1534.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 283.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.42049469965 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96697770646 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.583038869258 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 483.3 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.6939429263 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.833333333 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5833333333 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.0 7.06120827912 170% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.299502131963 0.244688304435 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0941356691776 0.084324248473 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0742622215869 0.0667982634062 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176149117773 0.151304729494 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0894026209881 0.056905535591 157% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.35 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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