People have yet to reach a consensus on if aging in the modern era is much better than in the past, with some doubting this argument and others advocating it. The essay analyzes these viewpoints using multidimensional lenses, thereby adding weight to my support for the second view.
Proponents of the first view could defend their stand when citing concerns about the environment and technology for the elderly. Accordingly, the rise of technology has contributed in no small part to the increasing mental problems of the elderly. For example, the proliferation of social networking sites, say Facebook or Tiktok, has deepened the gap between the elderly and their children, with young people spending most of their time surfing newsfeed or posting videos. As a result, the elderly may suffer a sense of loneliness, sometimes irrelevance and disorientation. Also, today’s degraded environment is worth considering. Contrary to the past when air contamination and water pollution happened occasionally and locally, they are now the pressing issues of the 21st century, with increasing frequency and immense impacts on people’s health. Consequently, today’s old people have been increasingly susceptible to respiratory diseases and cancers.
Yet, people can find aging much better than in the past when seeing this problem through economic and societal lenses. Economically, today’s old people have a better solid financial foundation than their parents and grandparents did. Less than 100 years ago, people had to face wars taking place frequently, most citizens in the Third World had to work in a zero-sum game economy, and pension was a luxury. Today, all these problems have nearly gone as most citizens can enjoy long lasting peace, take advantage of globalization and economic integration, and hence can have savings and cushions of money for their old days, not to mention the fact that pension policies have become prevalent in many countries. Equally important is the improved public welfare. Contrary to the past when rarely did elderly citizens receive public welfare, this is nearly universal in today’s world, reflected in free medical services and financial support packages for old people, regardless of their financial status.
In conclusion, although changes in the modern world have posed concerns about the elderly’s health problems, great leaps in terms of economic and societal fields have provided the elderly with unprecedentedly sufficient living conditions, making aging in today’s world much better than in the past.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 712, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Equally,
...ave become prevalent in many countries. Equally important is the improved public welfar...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, consequently, first, hence, if, may, second, so, third, for example, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2171.0 1615.20841683 134% => OK
No of words: 395.0 315.596192385 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.49620253165 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88439213595 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 176.041082164 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.587341772152 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 654.3 506.74238477 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 75.9842705762 49.4020404114 154% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.6875 106.682146367 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6875 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.4375 7.06120827912 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212066572255 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0652395689397 0.084324248473 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0660285336922 0.0667982634062 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145549352592 0.151304729494 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0519898291983 0.056905535591 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.92 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.66 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 78.4519038076 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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