Some people think that in the modern world we are more dependent on each other, while others think that people have become more independent. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
In this modern society, some people think that we tend to rely on each other, while others think that people have become self-reliant. From my point of view, I strongly believe that people are becoming more and more independent.
To begin with, there are several reasons why people consider mankind to be more dependent. In today's world young adults have to face a lot of problems so they still need other’s support, basically from their parents in some way. Life is more complex and difficult, especially because the cost of living has increased so dramatically. With a high cost of living, a young individual depends on his parents or partner financially to fulfill basic needs like food, shelter, and education. Besides, in this modernization era young people are immersed in their busy schedule and high ambition so they do not spend enough time looking after their children. They tend to ask for grandparents’ help, for example in many Asian families grandparents often take care of the kids while the adults go out and earn a living.
On the other hand, some people think that humans are more independent these days. Firstly, many people migrate to other cities and countries to study, work and settle down, so people are becoming more and more independent. For instance, many students choose to study abroad instead of going to their local university, and this experience makes them more independent as they learn to live alone. Secondly, today's society is extremely competitive, so if it wasn't independent, it would be very difficult to compete with everyone. People should improve decision- making skills, critical thinking and many important skills, therefore,they also have to become self-dependent to deal with many problems.
In conclusion, it can be seen that people might still be dependent in some aspects but I am convinced that people have become more independent.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: wasn't
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Suggestion: , they
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, if, look, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1591.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 309.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14886731392 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76307563883 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.601941747573 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 495.0 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.3077443272 49.4020404114 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 113.642857143 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0714285714 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.9285714286 7.06120827912 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.424783842829 0.244688304435 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.158449650325 0.084324248473 188% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.145013005777 0.0667982634062 217% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.308571630756 0.151304729494 204% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.15674793425 0.056905535591 275% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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