Some people think that in order to prevent illness and disease, governments should make efforts in reducing environmental pollution and housing problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
It is true that by solving environmental issues and housing problems governments could protect their citizens from disease and illness. However, I would argue that there are more effective methods to deal with this problem.
On the one hand, illness and disease could be prevented by improving environmental and housing conditions for some reasons. The first reason is that in contemporary society, environmental contaminants such as high levels of exhaust fumes, industrial waste and water contamination are adversely affect people's healths. By improving the environment governments can provide a better living conditions for people and therefore reduce the potential of human getting disease or illness. The second reason is that providing more accommodation for the public is also an effective solution to reduce health risks. Many people are still homeless in society while many others habe to live in a poor condition, which makes them more vulnerable to viruses and health problems. By providing them shelters and better life quality governments can prevent the rise of endemic diseases such as malaria in society.
On the other hand, better measures could be conducted to tackle this issue. Firstly, many common diseases like obesity, heart problems are results of an unbalanced diet. These health problems could be prevented if governments promote a healthy diet and regular exercise. This measure is much cheaper and efficient than other solutions. Secondly, governments should allocate money to conduct research and development in medical field. Any breakthroughs in health sector like a cure for cancer could save thousands of people or prevent the rise of any potential epidemic.
In conclusion, while I accept that improving the environment and solving housing problems could prevent illness and disease, I believe that there are better measures to protect people from these health problems.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 295, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'affected'.
Suggestion: affected
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, while, in conclusion, such as, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1621.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 293.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.53242320819 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81344205698 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.546075085324 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 501.3 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.6697266608 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.066666667 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5333333333 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198111255125 0.244688304435 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.066321943764 0.084324248473 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0408195217355 0.0667982634062 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125711616495 0.151304729494 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0273221685457 0.056905535591 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.79 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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