Nowadays, many people believe that outdoor activities are necessary as they can bring about more benefits to the development of children while playing computer games performs the opposite. From my point of view, I totally agree with this statement.
On the one hand, playing computers may do more harm than good to the young generation as it has a bad influence on both their physical and mental health. Firstly, spending a huge amount of time staring at the green screen is proven to harm the children's eyesight. As computers consume Ultraviolet rays, which contributes to weakening the visibility of kids, children who spend more time playing online games are claimed to have higher possibility of myopia than kids who involve the majority of their time in outdoor activities. Secondly, if children devote more than 180 minutes per day to computer games, they will also have to face a great deal of mental problems including the lack of concentration and insomnia. Researches and studies have pointed out that harmless as it seems, these games can act as one of the biggest factors which is in account for lessening the number of neutrons in children’s brains, decline their ability to focus and in long term, can also affect the length of their sleeping schedule.
On the other hand, outdoor activities are much more advantageous as they can ensure children a healthy body and develop a better sense of cooperation in them. First of all, many doctors have advised that it is important for children from age 2 to 10 to play at least one sport regularly. This will not only strengthen their muscles but also establish evidence to improve their capacity to deal with illness. Moreover, by playing stretching-related games such as basketball or swimming, kids may also maximize their height. Furthermore, most outdoor games require kids to form a team. Therefore, those who play these can gain experiences about working in cooperation with others, thus, know the importance of teamwork and utilize it in their daily life. For instance, many children borned as the only child of the family have the tendency to be selfish and can rarely work in a crowded community. To solve this, a lot of parents have sent them to sports classes such as football or volleyball. In consequence, attending these classes work miracles in strengthening the bonds between them and other kids as well as showing them how to behave properly in an union of people.
To sum up, it is primarily true that out-of-door games and activities play an unnecessary part in the life-long development of children. Hence, it is suggested that parents should make more opportunities for their kids to participate in these ventures.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 1153, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, well, while, at least, for instance, such as, as well as, first of all, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 41.998997996 164% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2259.0 1615.20841683 140% => OK
No of words: 450.0 315.596192385 143% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6057793516 4.20363070211 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77644501361 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 176.041082164 141% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551111111111 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 693.0 506.74238477 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.0741568479 49.4020404114 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.5 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.7222222222 7.06120827912 166% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269844492416 0.244688304435 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0847582625052 0.084324248473 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0715365589255 0.0667982634062 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189522089945 0.151304729494 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0479572039532 0.056905535591 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.0946893788 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 78.4519038076 141% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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