Some people think that outdoor activities bring more beneficial for children's development than playing computer games. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Most children today are often glued to their phones or computers and play games. This thing brings many negative consequences for them. I fully agree with the statement that outdoor activities are more beneficial for children's development than playing computer games. I believe playing outside gives a lot of advantages for children.
The first benefit of outdoor activities is health improvement. Taking part in outdoor games can help children enhance their physical fitness. Children can enjoy the natural light and atmosphere, which makes children's bodies absorb Vitamin D and contributes to bone and muscle development. Also, being out in nature often improves their mood. Children always have a very positive attitude and are filled with happiness. This thing will positively impact brain development. Children who engage in many physical activities will cut the risk of diseases such as obesity, myopia, or even heart disease.
Moreover, playing outdoor activities helps children acquire many social skills. While participating in activities, they will be more likely to make friends and interact better with other children. So, they can be more active and easy to adapt to new habitats in their daily life. Besides, children also gradually form the ability to work in groups, solve situations through some teamwork games such as football, badminton, or folk games. Contacting much with nature will also help children have a rich imagination and increase creative thinking. All of these skills are so necessary for their future.
To sum up, instead of sitting at home and addicting computer games, why don't we let our children take part in more outdoor activities? They are good opportunities to develop children in both health and essential social skills.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 73, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... home and addicting computer games, why dont we let our children take part in more o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, moreover, so, while, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1489.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 277.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37545126354 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07962216107 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65958420779 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.631768953069 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 459.0 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.1634080629 49.4020404114 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.3684210526 106.682146367 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.5789473684 20.7667163134 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.68421052632 7.06120827912 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.67935871743 173% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.30565398895 0.244688304435 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0956878426869 0.084324248473 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0956014504664 0.0667982634062 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.203797010907 0.151304729494 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100007114214 0.056905535591 176% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 48.81 50.2224549098 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.33 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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