Some people think that the purpose of schools is to turn children into good citizens and workers rather than to benefit them as individuals To what extent do you agree or disagree

In accordance with the consideration of some people that the aim of educational places is a way to help young generations to find their own positions in society instead of personal priorities. From point of my view I definitely agree that children are sent to schools to acquire a diploma rather than gaining enough knowledge for a promising occupation in future.

Admittedly, for living without any problems connected with money certainly is a perfect salary. And it is an indisputable fact that in order to get an employment the most crucial thing needed is a piece of paper showed a particular degree and skill as well as some details about personality.

On the other hand having only diploma does not mean anything without sufficient knowledge as a result there are no achievements and developments in professions.

However, even having less ability previously, people can learn the job relevant strategies at work then in that case they can manage progressing both individualities and organisations.

By way of conclusion I once again reaffirmed my position that having degree helps to open the doors in any cases.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (2 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, so, then, well, as a result, as well as, in any case, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 948.0 1615.20841683 59% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 184.0 315.596192385 58% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15217391304 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.68302321012 4.20363070211 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08856357434 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 128.0 176.041082164 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.695652173913 0.561755894193 124% => OK
syllable_count: 301.5 506.74238477 59% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 5.43587174349 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 16.0721442886 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 36.6349894088 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.428571429 106.682146367 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2857142857 20.7667163134 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.4285714286 7.06120827912 162% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0953757345191 0.244688304435 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0364339976251 0.084324248473 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.045551516149 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.039904898071 0.151304729494 26% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0508658523078 0.056905535591 89% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.0946893788 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.05 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 78.4519038076 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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