Some people think that schools should reward students who show the best academic results, while others believe that it is more important to reward students who show improvements. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Some people think that schools should reward students who show the best academic results, while others believe that it is more important to reward students who show improvements. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

People have different views about whether we should reward students who get excellent academic results or achieve improvements. While a number of people believe that only students achieving the highest grades deserve rewarding, I think it is more reasonable to praise students who show improvements.
On the one hand, there are several reasons why awards should be given to students having excellent academic performance. Firstly, this can create a highly competitive studying environment so that students are more willing to put a lot of effort into learning. They will improve themselves everyday by preparing and reviewing lessons in order to get the highest grades and this will enhance the quality of education. Secondly, gifted students who are outstanding can be realized and they will have an opportunity to nurture their abilities. For example, at the school where I studied, pupils who get the highest score will be selected into a team and be trained for national examination.
On the other hand, I believe that giving encouragement to students who make strides in their studies results in more favorable outcomes. The first benefit is that this could provide equal chances among students to get rewards. These students will not longer be disappointed about themselves and they can feel more motivated instead. Another benefit is that this could reduce studying pressure which have caused some mental dysfunction for students, especially the ones who is going to take examinations. Moreover, if students are not forced to spend all of the time on learning academic subjects at schools, they can attend special courses which provide valuable skills such as English communication, looking up information on the Internet or problem-solving skills. This can meet the criteria of many recruiters which require specific knowledge and skills
In conclusion, although rewarding students with the highest scores is advantageous in some extent, it seems to me that it is better to give encouragement to those who have improved their level of academic performance.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 218, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to reward'.
Suggestion: to reward
...ts achieving the highest grades deserve rewarding, I think it is more reasonable to prais...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 550, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...er, if students are not forced to spend all of the time on learning academic subjects at s...
^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, while, for example, i think, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 7.30460921844 233% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1743.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 325.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.36307692308 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89370833516 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.575384615385 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 540.9 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.3974677204 49.4020404114 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.076923077 106.682146367 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.84615384615 7.06120827912 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.310100518828 0.244688304435 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117596197756 0.084324248473 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0987112921491 0.0667982634062 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.219714053443 0.151304729494 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.12422495455 0.056905535591 218% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.3 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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