Some people think that schools should reward students who show the best academic results, while others believe that it is more important to reward students who show improvements.Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Some people think that schools should reward students who show the best academic results, while others believe that it is more important to reward students who show improvements.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, at schools, there are full of stress for students in many aspects as the number of subjects, scores, rankings,... Therefore, schools should give awards to students. some people suggest that the awards should be spent for the highest score positions, while others offer to students improved in result. In my opinion, both two situations are special positive examples and deserve to receive encouraging presents.
On the one hand, students with the best academic result are definitely rewarded. The main reason is that they really studied hard for a long time to get surprised marks which help them take the first place in school's rank. the presents may seem to be a lovely compliment and give them motivations to keep trying next times. In fact, the presents, even small or big and valid or unusable, are meaningful and always bring a lot of happiness to students, especially children and teenagers. as understanding exactly the effectiveness, many schools in the world are willing to spend an useful fund as scholarships to their students in each term.
On the other hand, upgrading scores of a weak student group is also important to consider, even needs to be praised by a recognized award. it is clear that they must have buckled down in subjects they were not good at and then, they can enhance their ability. there is no reason that they can not get the award because of their efforts. Although in some areas, it is often ignored due to no benifit when a student just had a rank at 35 and then take the 31st place. However, i believe they can do more than that in near future and if having a small incentive, they can do better and better.
In conclusion, i concretely support for both students with the best result and recognized improvement should be spent deserved awards.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, really, so, then, therefore, while, in conclusion, in fact, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1485.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 309.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80582524272 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61678853588 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.605177993528 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 447.3 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.4803889617 49.4020404114 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 99.0 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.2 7.06120827912 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.179443663831 0.244688304435 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0615954063883 0.084324248473 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0503777011445 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115592286503 0.151304729494 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0433565775768 0.056905535591 76% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.0946893788 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 50.2224549098 136% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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