Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to cooperate rather than compete become more useful adults.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinions.
Recently, the phenomenon of the choose between competition or cooperation to teach to children and its corresponding impacts have sparked a long-running dispute. In this regard, loads of individuals are of the opinion that arousing the sense of competition in youngsters is far better than cooperation. In my view, teaching children to become a part of teams comes first with respect to psychology as well as benefits for would-be adults.
Obviously, such children who learn how to be a team member in schools, or even earlier in pre-schools, will become a far more adaptive adult in not distant future. Psychologically speaking, training children to have cooperation with their peers ends up to be more responsible youths. What’s more, it is likely that cooperation concepts lead to build up stronger sympathetic emotions among adolescence.
In addition, if children learn how to cooperate in a group, acquiring an apt position in their future life will be much easier due to one of the main requirements of today’s jobs is great ability of teamwork. Meanwhile, unlike other children who couldn’t experience cooperation, those children who are educated concepts of cooperation during childhood period, will become far less aggressive adults. Hence, they are capable of maintaining their jobs till retirement instead of firing.
On the other hand, we shouldn’t lose sight of others’ opinion about competition. They elucidate triggering competitive feelings of young children paves the way to turn them into prominent leaders. They shall not be frightened by failures thanks to learning how to compete against rivals. Likewise, struggling to reach the bests in their future life as they endeavor to prove their competition capabilities should be taken into consideration.
To sum up, despite compelling arguments on both sides, I opt to vigorously support the idea that whereas arousing competition sense in children has colossal advantages, teaching them to cooperate with people is far more useful. Eventually, like Shakespeare, competition or cooperation, that’s the question in today’s modern teaching techniques.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, if, likewise, well, whereas, while, in addition, as well as, in my view, to sum up, with respect to, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 41.998997996 148% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.3376753507 240% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1749.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 327.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.34862385321 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97745018851 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.596330275229 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 547.2 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 5.43587174349 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 16.0721442886 6% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 327.0 20.2975951904 1611% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 49.4020404114 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1749.0 106.682146367 1639% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 327.0 20.7667163134 1575% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 132.0 7.06120827912 1869% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.336644559297 0.244688304435 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.336644559297 0.084324248473 399% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0667982634062 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181265456189 0.151304729494 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0199726381142 0.056905535591 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 167.3 13.0946893788 1278% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -268.89 50.2224549098 -535% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 7.44779559118 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 132.0 11.3001002004 1168% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 15.23 12.4159519038 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 23.96 8.58950901804 279% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 60.0 9.78957915832 613% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 132.8 10.1190380762 1312% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 60.0 10.7795591182 557% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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