Some people think that sports play an important role in the development of society. Others think they are nothing more than a leisure activity. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
A question has been raised whether people's professed interest in sports has contributed to the development of society or they are merely a form of recreation. Although I understand why some people support the view that sport is in itself something people do to pass the time, I still believe there is much to gain from sports as far as society is concerned.
There are several reasons why people do not hold sport in high regard. The first one is that sport is commonly thought of as a niche hobby with its own subculture and community. Outsiders of these types of communities may not be aware of how high of a payment organizations often make to get a sponsorship or partnership deal, or how many millions of dollars a varsity team earns through collegiate football. Moreover, people who are not sports fans are deterred from reading the sport column because there is so much jargon being used to talk about a subject that is not of their interest that they just want to divert their attention to other topics. Over time, they become indifferent to what effects sports have had on the development of society and associate sports with the memories they had in PE classes at school.
Nevertheless, I am in favour of the opinion that sports have made big contributions to our society for several reasons. Firstly, sports bring people together and build a stronger community. Every year, stadiums around the world have their seats filled with millions of spectating fans during the finals of major sporting tournaments, like the UEFA Champions League, Wimbledon, or Super Bowl, let alone the TV viewerships and radio listeners. Secondly, sports intangibly contribute to the better physical well-being of the public. Apart from striving to attain the fitness level or body shape of sports players, people may also partake in athletic endeavors provided by their employers. Free gym memberships, for example, are a type of sport-related CSR program that is increasingly popular.
In conclusion, despite understanding why some people believe there is nothing more to sports other than a form of physical entertainment, I do think the reasons make a cogent case, and I still hold the view that sports shape and pervade the society we live in today in a constructive manner.
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Message: Consider replacing "in a constructive manner" with adverb for "constructive"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...nd pervade the society we live in today in a constructive manner.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, still, well, apart from, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1895.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 381.0 315.596192385 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97375328084 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80079181661 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 176.041082164 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.564304461942 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 577.8 506.74238477 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.8062917461 49.4020404114 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.357142857 106.682146367 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.2142857143 20.7667163134 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.5 7.06120827912 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249493661843 0.244688304435 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0842515180029 0.084324248473 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0669336416508 0.0667982634062 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17292301647 0.151304729494 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0618797573027 0.056905535591 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 50.2224549098 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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