One of the most conspicuous trends of today's world is a colossal upsurge in the number of individuals believing that success is depend on two factors hard work and determination. While others oppose it by saying appearance and wealth factor are prominent when it comes to success. In my opinion the former apprehension seems to be more rational. This essay will further elaborate my views in upcoming paragraphs.
To commence with there are deluges of arguments in favour of hard work and determination leads to success. The most preponderant one is that start from scratch. To elaborate it in order to become successful in life. With the help of determination and hard work people start to learn anything from basic, when they start anything from basic there are less chances that they will fail. These things guarantees that anyone can become successful in their life, if they start to focus on only on two factors that are hard work and determination. Thanks to the wide range of advantages hard work and determination offers masses can enhance the quality and productivity of their lives with much ease, efficacy and convenience.
Furthermore, another pivotal aspect of aforementioned proposition is that, it is only likely to help in one excel and thrive in varied areas such as overall improvement and enhancement. To make it justifiable determination and hard work are two prominent building blocks of success. Because when these two things emerged in individuals life. They can acquire great deal of knowledge in any field. Not only enrich their knowledge but also their physical and cognitive skills become better with the help of dedication and hard work. For instance the study results published by the government of Australia in March 2014 and April 2016 clearly indicate that there are some successful people in this world like Elon Musk, Steve jobs, Bill gates and Mark Zuckrberge the study found two prominent factor in there life that factors are hard work and determination. Hence, it is clear why hard work and determination is major factors for success.
On the other hand a section of society contradicts above said views by providing reliable justification they claim that without wealth and appearance are the major element for success. Thy said that in order to become successful money and appearance plays part and partial role in life. Because there are several setbacks that occurred in on the journey to success, in order to deal with these kinds of obstacles money and wealth plays an important role. For example when Elon Musk launched his first satellite he got failed in that so, in order to build new one they need money. So he took help of giant organisations like NASA they only helped him because with the help of appearance they represent successfully in front of them. That is reason why many people consider wealth and appearance two main elements to get success.
To conclude, having pondered over above stated hard work, determination and wealth, appearance plays important role for success in various ways. Without them success cannot be obtained.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 129, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'depended'.
Suggestion: depended
...f individuals believing that success is depend on two factors hard work and determinat...
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Line 3, column 351, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun chances is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...hey start anything from basic there are less chances that they will fail. These thin...
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Line 3, column 398, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'guarantee'.
Suggestion: guarantee
...ances that they will fail. These things guarantees that anyone can become successful in th...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 284, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...o prominent building blocks of success. Because when these two things emerged in indivi...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 791, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'factor' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'factors'.
Suggestion: factors
...uckrberge the study found two prominent factor in there life that factors are hard wor...
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Line 7, column 629, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ok help of giant organisations like NASA they only helped him because with the he...
^^
Line 9, column 187, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ithout them success cannot be obtained.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, if, so, while, for example, for instance, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 10.4138276553 230% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 17.0 7.30460921844 233% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 44.0 24.0651302605 183% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 80.0 41.998997996 190% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 8.3376753507 324% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2590.0 1615.20841683 160% => OK
No of words: 511.0 315.596192385 162% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06849315068 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75450408675 4.20363070211 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73710945782 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 176.041082164 140% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.483365949119 0.561755894193 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 803.7 506.74238477 159% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 16.0721442886 156% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.4948509879 49.4020404114 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.6 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.44 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.84 7.06120827912 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 8.67935871743 230% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.285999917944 0.244688304435 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0856488880253 0.084324248473 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0489529103763 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168150033137 0.151304729494 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0161946679727 0.056905535591 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 78.4519038076 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 129, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'depended'.
Suggestion: depended
...f individuals believing that success is depend on two factors hard work and determinat...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 351, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun chances is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...hey start anything from basic there are less chances that they will fail. These thin...
^^^^
Line 3, column 398, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'guarantee'.
Suggestion: guarantee
...ances that they will fail. These things guarantees that anyone can become successful in th...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 284, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...o prominent building blocks of success. Because when these two things emerged in indivi...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 791, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'factor' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'factors'.
Suggestion: factors
...uckrberge the study found two prominent factor in there life that factors are hard wor...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 629, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ok help of giant organisations like NASA they only helped him because with the he...
^^
Line 9, column 187, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ithout them success cannot be obtained.
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, if, so, while, for example, for instance, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 10.4138276553 230% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 17.0 7.30460921844 233% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 44.0 24.0651302605 183% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 80.0 41.998997996 190% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 8.3376753507 324% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2590.0 1615.20841683 160% => OK
No of words: 511.0 315.596192385 162% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06849315068 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75450408675 4.20363070211 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73710945782 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 176.041082164 140% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.483365949119 0.561755894193 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 803.7 506.74238477 159% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 16.0721442886 156% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.4948509879 49.4020404114 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.6 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.44 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.84 7.06120827912 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 8.67935871743 230% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.285999917944 0.244688304435 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0856488880253 0.084324248473 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0489529103763 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168150033137 0.151304729494 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0161946679727 0.056905535591 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 78.4519038076 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.