Some people think success in life comes from hard work and determination. Others think money and appearance are more important.
Discuss both sides and give your opinion
There has been always a controversy as regards whether industrious people will reap success in their career or whether financial background and beauty plays more crucial role. In this essay, some important factors will be put in consideration to answer these issues and from my point of view, I agree with the former for the following reasons.
On the one hand, people who work hard and make all effort will be easy to achieve a success. The first reason is that if they do not have attempt and hard-working, they are unable to accumulate sufficient knowledge and skills to attain their achievement. For instance, Nick Vujivic does not have an attractive appearance; in contrast, he lost his limbs because of a rare disorder. However, by his effortless, he graduated from universities with accountancy and financial planning certifications. Furthermore, he is also a renowned motivational speaker across the world.
On the other hand, money and appearance are attributed to a key for the successful person. One of the most striking reasons is that money is likely to help people come to their dream. Having money, they will have ability to join courses to enhance their skills in a particular field leading them to the futuristic promotion in their career. In terms of appearance, I suppose that it will be right in some jobs which beauty is deemed a top priority. From my experience, I failed when applying for reception position in a well-known hotel in Saigon. This is due to the fact that I was less beautiful than other candidates. However, I climbed a successful ladder when I changed my orientation to another job without appearance.
In conclusion, I am strongly of the opinion that beauty and money is less important than determination and hard-work for the aforementioned reasons.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 139, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'attempted'.
Suggestion: attempted
...irst reason is that if they do not have attempt and hard-working, they are unable to ac...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, so, well, as regards, for instance, i suppose, in conclusion, in contrast, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1504.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 298.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04697986577 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99328106659 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.604026845638 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 463.5 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.5960315117 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.266666667 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8666666667 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.06666666667 7.06120827912 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167148732677 0.244688304435 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0553273669419 0.084324248473 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0477689729668 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101851025211 0.151304729494 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0240071560456 0.056905535591 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.0946893788 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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