There are some who think that adolescents should be required to do unpaid community work, which they believe will be extremely beneficial for them and the society. I completely disagree with this statement due to the fact that they should spend their free time on more important things.
To begin with, adolescence is where teenagers go through changes and it can be a very stressful period of time for some, plus going to school for eight hours straight is already a fulltime job; hence they need time for themselves. Furthermore, after a full day of schooling, teenagers usually tend to blow off some steam, some might have hobbies, some may hang out with friends and go to the movies, and some may even stay at home and do their homework, as long as they cut loose of their stressed day. Unlike adults, teenagers have a long future ahead of them after high school to do work, while they cannot replace the adolescent period after it is too late. Finally forcing teenagers to do unpaid community work will do more damage than good.
Additionally, unpaid community work is more of punishment than help, in fact it can relate to serious adolescent problems. Going to work on a daily basis without getting paid as well, makes the teenager feel like he is being trapped and as a form of punishment, while he sees his friends having a good time; this will affect his mental health and can lead to hating education and failure at school. Each period of time in a person's life must be lived as it should be in order to maintain balance, as for students in high schools they should spend their time between education and doing what they like.
In conclusion, I believe that mandatory unpaid community work is harmful for teenagers. However, letting them decide what to do with their free time is more productive.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, so, well, while, as for, in conclusion, in fact, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1502.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 318.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72327044025 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44434105883 2.80592935109 87% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.547169811321 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 455.4 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.099401392 49.4020404114 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.545454545 106.682146367 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.9090909091 20.7667163134 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.90909090909 7.06120827912 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.391214860373 0.244688304435 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.163440493197 0.084324248473 194% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0667553851841 0.0667982634062 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.263955549487 0.151304729494 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0633881421787 0.056905535591 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 11.3001002004 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.69 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 78.4519038076 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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