Some people think that travel is necessary to learn about other nations others however think that tv and internet is best way to learn discuss both views and give your opinion

Thanks to technological advances nowadays, people have access to many modern communication tools which makes our life easier. One of the fields that are influenced by technology is travel. Many people concur that the Internet is the sufficient tool which can completely replace the whole traditional travel industry, but I strongly opine that there are still many aspects that Internet travel cannot be the perfect replacement.

Firstly, traditional travel gives people the real experience that the Internet cannot. Breathing the pure atmosphere in ecotourism areas or joining the crowd in beautiful festivals are some activities that we must take ourselves into the tourist places to actually feel it. The Internet just obtains us the raw and tasteless information and what we need to do is read or watch it and imagine how we feel when we take that tour. It seems too dreary and boring.

Secondly, as we know the information we find on the Internet are so varied and some of them are unreal and overstated. Because of commercial purposes, the advertisers can flatter the information about their travel products to make people pay attention to. Therefore,
to have a clearest view of the destination that we want to visit, we should experience that place by ourselves.

Last but not least, practical experience provides us with a lot of valuable skills and knowledge. Attending some activities on the trip, we will have the opportunity to discover both the places and ourselves. After the trip, we will know more about our limitations and our abilities. Travel is also the best time to gain more practical skills such as soft skills, survival skills and so on. Moreover, travel helps us cultivate our knowledge. Cultural knowledge or cultural knowledge are some valuable lessons that are hard to get on the Internet.

In conclusion, there are many benefits of practical travel that the TV or Internet cannot bring us. Furthermore, the value of travel is the experience. It is better to enjoy the real beauty of nature, breathe the real air and contact the real people. Technology advances give us an easier way to work and entertain but it cannot totally replace the practicality of the real world.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, in conclusion, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 24.0651302605 170% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1850.0 1615.20841683 115% => OK
No of words: 365.0 315.596192385 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06849315068 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77114857096 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.531506849315 0.561755894193 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 580.5 506.74238477 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.647507972 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.5 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.25 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.3 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144823324314 0.244688304435 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0462041128982 0.084324248473 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0357513086224 0.0667982634062 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.071920002347 0.151304729494 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0213801863217 0.056905535591 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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