Some people think young people are not suitable for important positions in the government, while other people think it is a good idea for young people to take on these positions. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Recently, whether young people are eligible for crucial positions in the government has become a fiercely controversial issue. Some people assert that young generation cannot deal with important positions related to the government such as presidents and ministers, while others argue otherwise. Personally, I believe that both arguments should be given equal weight. In the following essay, both views will be discussed before a conclusion is reached with my opinion.
On the one hand, it seems difficult to refute the idea that young workers can play an important role in the field of high positions. Perhaps the most compelling reason is that they are more likely to think flexibly since they are not conservative, compared to the old generation. This ability enables them to handle essential issues about their work more effectively. In addition, hiring young people in important positions makes it possible for other young workers to become motivated as they consider that they can be promoted. As an illustration, one recent article released by the Seoul Times illustrates that Kihun Lee, who was 35 years old in 2018, was promoted to vice president in the field of financial department of Seoul city hall and this phenomenon exerted a positive influence on a multitude of young people in Korea.
On the other hand, it seems short-sighted to contend that young people are entitled to obtain important positions. The most oft-cited argument against such a view is that some of specific departments in the government should hire elderly people to achieve their goals. As an brief illustration, some of government officers who work in the specific fields, such as people engaged in militaries and police offices, have to follow gruelling rules. Thus, people's experience often takes priority over flexibility and elderly people have a tendency to have a huge amount of experience. Furthermore, elderly workers are easy to overcome unpredicted situations because their abilities resulted from a myriad of failures that they experienced. In lighted of the above, I also find these are persuasive.
In conclusion, it is undeniable that there are a variety of opinions about this topic. However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, it can be concluded that each side of the debate has its strengths, as discussed above.
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... However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, it can be concluded that each side of ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, however, if, so, thus, while, in addition, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1973.0 1615.20841683 122% => OK
No of words: 374.0 315.596192385 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27540106952 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86117371403 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.564171122995 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 628.2 506.74238477 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.2894427244 49.4020404114 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.058823529 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.05882352941 7.06120827912 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.377684114104 0.244688304435 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105621671192 0.084324248473 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0891291382743 0.0667982634062 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198960261382 0.151304729494 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102891329136 0.056905535591 181% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.2 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 78.4519038076 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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