Some people think young people should go to university to further their education while others think they should be encouraged to work as car mechanics or builders etc to serve society Discuss both views and give your own opinion

After graduating from high school, people have to find themselves a direction, a path that is best for them. For some, they choose to get university, others choose to get to find a job. In my perspective, I strongly believe that obtaining a university degree is the best way to approach success in a career.
Firstly, getting a university degree will give the chances of getting good jobs. In reality, people just need skills more than qualifications, but if they do not have a university degree, they have to put a lot of effort for a long time before others can see their ability and confidence to get a job. On the other hand, a university degree is like evidence prove that they have the necessary knowledge and skills to fulfill the work requirements.
Secondly, a university degree will provide more opportunities for young people, which is what most employers are expecting. University graduates will probably get a much higher salary than those without a degree at university. Furthermore, the job market is becoming more and more competitive, and sometimes there are hundreds of applicants for one position in a company. Young people who do not have qualifications from a university or college will not be able to compete. It is an obvious advantage for university graduates.
For the reason to mention, I assume that the best route to get a successful career is to finish university or college education.

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Average: 7.3 (2 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 41.998997996 64% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1178.0 1615.20841683 73% => OK
No of words: 240.0 315.596192385 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90833333333 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.93597934253 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98100467777 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 176.041082164 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.558333333333 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 391.5 506.74238477 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.9579730401 49.4020404114 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.1666666667 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.41666666667 7.06120827912 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133007804045 0.244688304435 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0540248248796 0.084324248473 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0376043013776 0.0667982634062 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0800323701425 0.151304729494 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0394412641325 0.056905535591 69% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 78.4519038076 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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