Some people think that young people should spend their free time with their families instead of enjoying outside entertainment. However, others disagree.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Everyone has their own plans for spending their free time. There are young individuals who think that time away from work or studies should be spent with one’s family, while others believe that enjoying time away from home is far better. In my point of view, enjoying one’s free time, especially when a person is young, should be balanced between the two options.
Undoubtedly, young people nowadays prefer te enjoy activities with their peers if they are not at work or school. This is secondary to the fact that they have the same level of developmental age and in dire need of approval from their peers. For instance, young adults, in their early 20’s who work in the same unit, prefer to hang out after work in entertainment bars or plan weekend trips. For these groups of individuals, activities are more enjoyable because the majority have the same likes and dislikes and it strengthens one’s friendship and camaraderie. Eventually, young people develop a positive outlook in relationships and in their life, as a whole.
However, it could also be noted, that spending time away outside with friends, colleagues, or schoolmates have its own drawback, such as not being able to spend time with one’s family. Without nurturing relationships within the basic unit of a family, the social support system of a person is negatively affected. The main reason why young people cannot bond with their families is the belief that their parents are most of the time forcing them to engage in activities away from their preference. For instance, an adolescent in the family cannot appreciate the walk and play in parks which their younger siblings enjoy. This attitude of young people towards family time is the reason why they want to be with their peers.
Considering both ways of spending a young person’s free time it could be noted that one could not be better than the other. A young person should be taught how to be well-rounded and manage how to spend quality time to establish long-lasting relationships both with their peers and family.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, look, second, so, then, well, while, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1721.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 346.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97398843931 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6034623687 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523121387283 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 514.8 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.3236464709 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.733333333 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0666666667 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.13333333333 7.06120827912 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.382450971081 0.244688304435 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.142154048871 0.084324248473 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0769079759393 0.0667982634062 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.241544922078 0.151304729494 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0491592838923 0.056905535591 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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